Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In recent years, through the internet, air travel, trade and popular culture, globalisation has rapidly increased. Many people believe that the increased interaction between nations through globalisation is a good thing.

Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

the increase in air travel ,popular culture and globalisation increases which in a very important in the era where we are living .in which people of different nations can interact each other and shares their culture all over the world. in the past era is was very difficult to share the cultures with each other due to travel problems, communication issues and the some political issues but now can share any thing beyond the boarders by one click and all this happen because of globalisation. we have many platforms like social; media applications and travel facilities to go anywhere around the world whenever i want .

in the past world was facing some main issues like communication , internet and traveling after the invention of plans and mobile phones. the world become totally change people can watch the cultures , their living lifestyle by only one click on internet and want to go their by air travel within some hours which is the main thing for rapid increase in interaction of nation all over the world .the social media and internet have a great part in it . most countries have a world famous culture like pakistan ,nepal Italy France and others . peoples all over the world going every years to saw the cultural event which are organized every year . in pakistan we also have a world famous culture in kalash valley . thousands of people every year come to take part in their cultural events . tourist interact them and experience the things which they dont have in their country and never experience before

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all these these things make connection between the nations. and make them, connected. this is only occur due to air travel.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing the impact of globalisation on international interaction. However, the development of ideas is limited. While you mention the benefits of cultural exchange and travel, the arguments are repetitive and lack depth. You state that globalisation is a 'good thing' but do not fully explore the complexities or provide a balanced view, which is expected in a 'discuss' task. The position is clear, but the supporting examples, such as the mention of Kalash Valley, are not fully integrated into a cohesive argument about the broader implications of globalisation. To improve, ensure each paragraph introduces a distinct, well-supported point.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay lacks a clear structure. Paragraphing is inconsistent, with the second paragraph being quite long and the third being a single sentence. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'in the past' and 'one click'. There is a lack of logical progression between sentences, making the flow of ideas disjointed. To achieve a higher band, you should use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in contrast') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader through your argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. You frequently use basic phrases like 'one click', 'main issues', and 'go anywhere'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'due to travel problems' instead of 'logistical barriers' or 'peoples all over the world going every years to saw' instead of 'tourists travel annually to witness'. The range is sufficient to communicate basic ideas, but it lacks the precision and flexibility required for higher bands. Expanding your vocabulary to include more academic collocations related to globalisation would significantly improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'globalisation increases which in a very important'), missing articles, and incorrect tense usage (e.g., 'the world become totally change'). Sentence structures are mostly simple or contain errors when attempting complexity. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with misplaced commas and periods. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and proofreading for common errors like missing articles and pluralization before submitting your work.

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