Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In recent years, through the internet, air travel, trade and popular culture, globalisation has rapidly increased. Many people believe that the increased interaction between nations through globalisation is a good thing.
Discuss this view and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Society is divided into altruistic and ego centric mind-sets of people. Although some masses hold the view point that recent years, through the increased interaction between nations through globalisation is a good thing because of some reasons. I believe that some people think globalisation is good thing.
On the one hand, the main reason why some masses favor the former statement is because internet provide fastest service. This is due to fact that people
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0
The response is significantly under the required 250-word minimum, containing only 74 words. Because the essay is incomplete and stops abruptly after the introduction and the start of one body paragraph, it fails to address the prompt's requirement to discuss the view and provide a personal opinion in a developed manner. The ideas are not extended or supported, and the response is essentially a fragment. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, leading to a low score for task achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text is too brief to demonstrate a coherent structure or logical progression of ideas. While there is an attempt to use cohesive devices like 'On the one hand' and 'Although', the essay lacks a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. The abrupt ending makes it impossible to evaluate the flow of arguments or the effective use of paragraphing. The referencing is also unclear, as the sentences do not connect to form a cohesive whole.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'some masses' and 'good thing' are used in a way that lacks precision and academic tone. There is no evidence of a range of vocabulary, and the word choice is limited. The errors in collocation, such as 'ego centric mind-sets of people', indicate a lack of control over more sophisticated lexical items. The vocabulary is insufficient to convey complex ideas effectively.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains several grammatical errors that impede clarity. For example, the sentence 'Although some masses hold the view point that recent years, through the increased interaction between nations through globalisation is a good thing because of some reasons' is grammatically incoherent and lacks a main clause. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the existing sentences are poorly constructed. Frequent errors in syntax and sentence formation make the text difficult to follow.
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