Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-15

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In recent years, through the internet, air travel, trade and popular culture, globalisation has rapidly increased. Many people believe that the increased interaction between nations through globalisation is a good thing.

Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Internet is helpful in every sector in the world whereas it is observed that impartace of air travel has incused in recent years. It is believed by various persons that it is a good idea to interacting native people through globlisation. I will share personal opinion in upcoming paragraphs.

Internet plays such an important role eveyones life, because its gives the opportunities blosum themself. In the airways sectors internet has unavoidable significants, because it is gives relaxsation in prebooking teckets that saves the travelers' time. People should definately travel different countries, so they can intrections by face to face. Using messages and having video calls are also better by travelling experience can increase personal knowledge along with introduce with new culture such as language, food, clothing preferences also.

Moving further, another benefit of travelling by air can increase business oppoturnities as well, that can increased the economy of any working sector. Apart from this the globlisation increased the impart & export business too in, which

business man can improve their work experience as well. Lastly travelling the different countries has numbers of advantages in every field.

In my oppinion globlisation has wast advantages in every feild either in business and personal life also that makes the person more creative and knowledgable as well.

So people should definately travel out of their native country that provides various aspects that are quiet essential in everyones life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing the benefits of globalisation and air travel, but it fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While a position is stated, the arguments remain superficial and lack sufficient supporting evidence or examples. The connection between the internet and air travel is somewhat tenuous, and the essay ends abruptly in the third paragraph, leaving the argument incomplete. To improve, you must expand your points with specific examples and ensure you meet the length requirement to allow for full development of your position.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The transition between the internet's role and the benefits of air travel is disjointed. While some cohesive devices like 'Moving further' and 'Apart from this' are used, they are often applied mechanically or incorrectly. The final paragraph is fragmented, and the overall flow is hindered by the lack of clear, logical links between sentences. To improve, focus on using transition words more naturally and ensuring each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that directly supports your main argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'impartace' for importance, 'incused' for increased, 'blosum' for blossom, and 'wast' for vast. These errors occasionally make it difficult to follow your meaning. You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle to use less common items accurately. To improve, focus on learning the correct spelling of common academic words and practice using synonyms to avoid repetition. Expanding your range of collocations related to globalisation and travel will also help you achieve a higher score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There is a limited range of grammatical structures, and the essay contains frequent errors in sentence construction, verb tense, and subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'it is gives relaxsation', 'globlisation increased the impart & export'). Many sentences are awkward or grammatically incomplete. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors prevents the use of more complex structures. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence patterns and proofreading for common errors like missing articles, incorrect verb forms, and punctuation mistakes. Practising complex sentence structures will also help improve your range.

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