Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In recent years, through the internet, air travel, trade and popular culture, globalisation has rapidly increased. Many people believe that the increased interaction between nations through globalisation is a good thing.
Discuss this view and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Nowadays, this world is completly changed by the internet services.In recent yerars through the internet ,air travel ,trade and famous culture ,globalisation has rapidly speed up.All these responsibilities are covered by the internet.Many people believe that the grew up interaction between nations or countries through globalisation is a good activity.This extent is true.
First of all,in past years the air travel,trade and popular culture,and globalisation is increased through the internet.It is correct because internet services are proved to be advantagenous for individulas in recent years.For example people boked online tickets of aeroplane through the internet also trading online and communicate with different kinds of people all over the world.Information Technology is most crucial factor of internet .
Second of all,most of people believe that the increased in communication with different nations all over the world it is also beneficial view.For example similar people of different religions attached with different people all over the world through the globalisation through the services of Information Technology we communicate with peoples as if they are living in the same village .Globalistion is most important factor and also speed up in reent years.For instance,my uncle lived out of country and he contact with all of his family members and also with friends through the internet.
Third,the use of internet is beneficial for all peoples all over the world.According to my experience they buy something online from different plattforms such as daraz.They pay bill online and also use ATM card online or payment online.
As conclusion,internet services such as gloabalisation is very popular in recent years.people of all nations communicate with each other through the internet.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing the impact of globalisation and providing an opinion. However, the development of ideas is limited and repetitive. While you mention the internet, air travel, and trade, the explanation of how these factors contribute to the 'good' aspects of globalisation remains superficial. For instance, the paragraph regarding online shopping (Daraz) is somewhat tangential and does not strongly support the core argument about international interaction. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on a distinct, well-explained reason that directly answers why globalisation is beneficial, rather than simply listing examples of internet usage.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'First of all', 'Second of all', and 'Third' are used to signal progression, but the internal flow within paragraphs is disjointed. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the sentence 'similar people of different religions attached with different people', which lacks logical clarity. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each sentence logically follows the previous one to create a smoother, more cohesive argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'internet', 'globalisation', and 'good'. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'famous culture' instead of 'popular culture', and 'grew up interaction' instead of 'increased interaction'. Spelling errors are frequent, including 'completly', 'yerars', 'advantagenous', 'individulas', and 'plattforms'. These errors occasionally impede the flow of reading. To reach a higher band, you should work on using more precise academic vocabulary and pay closer attention to spelling and collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay relies primarily on simple sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('globalisation is increased'), article usage, and tense consistency ('my uncle lived out of country and he contact'). Punctuation is also problematic, with inconsistent spacing around commas and periods. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar limits the score. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles before attempting more complex structures.
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