Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In recent years, through the internet, air travel, trade and popular culture, globalisation has rapidly increased. Many people believe that the increased interaction between nations through globalisation is a good thing.

Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In today era things is changing day by the it gain more attention . In past years it is more popular method to intreact with others through technology . They are more uniqe and conviniat way the intereact with other .

Interact with globalisation is rising more and more . It is simply way to talk with other through one call . They were no waste your time . Also it is budget friendly and helpful for people those who do his business and for students they teach a lot . Not only for this but other many things to do as well .

In agree with those people those tell about globalisation is good things in politics they talk to each other from different countries by online they discuss a lots of things and take big dissiuon through interaction .

Suddenly few days ago my brother live in abroad me and my family call to him but they not pick up the call and i try many time but they don,t pick it my family will take stress but i can call to the head of the sydney city and tell about the sitution and after some time they can call me back and give details about my brother .

In conclusion it is easy and fast way to interact with other . In our socites it increased too much and help to work from home and take nation meetings through call and it will also safe your privacy .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response addresses the topic of globalisation, but the development of ideas is weak and often tangential. While you mention that globalisation is a 'good thing' in politics and business, the supporting arguments are underdeveloped. The personal anecdote about your brother in Sydney is largely irrelevant to the broader discussion of globalisation and fails to support the prompt effectively. The position is stated but lacks the depth required for a higher band. To improve, focus on providing clear, logical arguments related to the prompt, such as economic growth or cultural exchange, rather than unrelated personal stories.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is frequently disrupted by unclear transitions and disjointed sentences. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the abrupt shift between the introduction and the body paragraphs. The referencing is often confusing, particularly in the anecdote about your brother, where the use of pronouns like 'they' and 'it' makes it difficult to follow the narrative. To improve, use linking words like 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in contrast' to connect your ideas more smoothly and ensure each paragraph has a clear, singular focus.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'good things', 'things', and 'way'. There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'intreact', 'uniqe', 'conviniat', and 'dissiuon', which occasionally impede the reader's understanding. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to discuss the complexities of globalisation. You should aim to incorporate more topic-specific vocabulary related to international relations, economics, and technology, and focus on accurate spelling and word formation to convey your ideas more professionally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammar is characterized by frequent errors in sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and tense usage. Examples include 'In today era things is changing', 'They were no waste your time', and 'my brother live in abroad'. These errors are persistent and often make the meaning unclear. The essay relies almost entirely on simple sentence structures, with very few attempts at complex sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and practicing the correct use of articles and prepositions. Developing a better grasp of complex sentence structures will also be essential for a higher score.

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