Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In recent years, through the internet, air travel, trade and popular culture, globalisation has rapidly increased. Many people believe that the increased interaction between nations through globalisation is a good thing.

Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Last few years across the internet air travel ,trade and famous culture,worldwide integration has quickly go up.most of the people believe that the growth interaction between nation across internationalization is a best thing.

First of all i want to tell you that the world has become global village because of internet. Most the the news released through the internet . Internet has become most important use of our daily life. Last few years the people has travel from worldwide tour because most of the people watch the beautiful places,Lakes,Rivers and mountains through the internet and they want to visit the beautiful sight of countries . According to my experience Pakistan has to much travel places in their cities . Most of the foreigner come Pakistan to see the beauty of swat, Skardu, Kalam and many other beautiful snow fall cities. Some people come Pakistan to see the culture of old traditions and history . Many people believe that the growth interact between the nations across internationalization is a best thing. I think so

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 173 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas. While the prompt asks for a discussion of globalisation and a personal opinion, the response is underdeveloped. It focuses almost exclusively on tourism in Pakistan rather than addressing the broader implications of globalisation mentioned in the prompt (trade, internet, culture). The position is stated but lacks the depth and supporting arguments required for a higher band. The response is essentially a list of points about local tourism rather than a balanced discussion of the topic.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The essay lacks a clear structure. There is no introduction that paraphrases the prompt effectively, and the body paragraphs are not clearly delineated. The use of cohesive devices is very limited and often repetitive (e.g., 'Most of the people', 'Many people'). The progression of ideas is disjointed; the transition from the general concept of a 'global village' to specific tourist spots in Pakistan is abrupt and lacks logical flow. Paragraphing is insufficient, making the text feel like a collection of loosely related sentences rather than a cohesive argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive. There is a reliance on simple, everyday words, and the student struggles with collocations and word choice. For example, 'famous culture' should be 'popular culture', and 'growth interaction' is not a standard collocation. The term 'internationalization' is used incorrectly in context. There is no attempt to use less common or academic vocabulary, which limits the ability to convey complex ideas. Spelling errors, such as 'foreigner' instead of 'foreigners', further detract from the overall quality of the writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The grammar is characterized by frequent errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'people has travel', 'Pakistan has to much travel places') and article usage. The sentence structures are predominantly simple, with very few attempts at complex sentences. Punctuation is also problematic, with missing spaces after commas and incorrect capitalization. The lack of control over basic grammatical structures makes the writing difficult to follow at times, preventing the achievement of a higher band score.

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