Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In recent years, through the internet, air travel, trade and popular culture, globalisation has rapidly increased. Many people believe that the increased interaction between nations through globalisation is a good thing.

Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Internet has been a key fuel for the rise of globalisation in recent years through trade, travel, and culture. Many people think its a good idea that there is an increase in interaction between nations, i support this view because it helps bring different cultures together and has economical benefit. My opinions is stated further.

One major advantage of globalisation is increase in economical benefit for country. Through Globalisation, it is possible to trade and commerce between nations. Additionally, in this internet era, people and small business owners are able to sell their trades and goods to other countries which results in more financial profits. For example, the mocha tea powder which is prevalent in japan is bought by huge number of residents of USA which directly contributes to japan economy. I think due to globalisation, trading with developed countries can help underdeveloped nations improve their overall economy.

Moreover, internet has promoted different types of culture which has influenced more people to travel. To experience this cultures of different nations, people in recent times has started to do foreign vacations , which makes cultural impact and bring people close altogether. This increase in interaction between different nationalities has made community more stronger and people now get to learn about different types of food, music, dance and skills. For instance, famous Korean band BTS, concerts are attended by various types of people in which they sing together their lyrics and make memories together.

In conclusion, i believe that through internet, globalisation has made huge impact on improving economical state and helped in cultural bonding between different nations.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: discussing the view on globalisation and providing a personal opinion. The position is clear from the introduction. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you provide examples like the Japanese tea trade and BTS concerts, the analysis remains superficial. To reach a higher band, you should expand on the 'why' and 'how' behind your arguments, ensuring that the link between globalisation and the specific benefits mentioned is more thoroughly explored. The conclusion is also quite brief and merely restates the introduction rather than synthesising the main points.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, each with a clear central topic. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Additionally', 'Moreover', and 'For instance' to link ideas. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly repetitive. There are also instances where the flow between sentences is slightly disjointed, such as in the transition between the general mention of the internet and the specific example of the tea trade. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring smoother transitions between sentences would enhance the overall coherence of the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to convey your meaning clearly. You use some topic-specific terms like 'globalisation', 'economical benefit', and 'commerce'. However, the range is somewhat limited, and there are errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'economical benefit' (should be 'economic benefit'), 'make community more stronger' (should be 'make communities stronger'), and 'huge impact on improving economical state'. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations and a wider variety of academic vocabulary to express your ideas with greater sophistication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including missing articles ('the' internet, 'the' Japanese economy), subject-verb agreement issues ('people... has started', 'concerts are attended... in which they sing'), and punctuation errors. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, they are frequent enough to impact the overall fluency. To achieve a higher score, focus on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy, particularly regarding articles, pluralisation, and verb tense consistency.

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