Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In recent years, through the internet, air travel, trade and popular culture, globalisation has rapidly increased. Many people believe that the increased interaction between nations through globalisation is a good thing.

Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In past years , the rapidly changed in air travel , import and Export and famous culture and globalisation was measured through internet. Lots of indiviual believe that interaction between countries has increased by globalisation is a right thing.

To begain with the globalisation is increased in past recent years through internet the air travel , trade between countries and popular cultures is rapily increased due to increasing in technology as well because of this the internet is now available in almost everywhere and cheap in some countries as well .

The social media is grow insanly by internet and for this popular culture and hidden culture on remote area is now shown in social medias. about trade is also effected by globalisation through air , water and land because now countries has better connectivity and infrastracture.

The groups of people think that too much interaction between nations through gloalisation is a good thing but every coin has two side , so it has advantage and disadvantage as well , through globalisation the trade is ongoing where the country relation have good and sometime it ceate conflicts for example take India first they trade oil to russia at low prize and have very good relation , it create tension with america Now we trade to america because of tariff was increased by america to india and also they dont have good relation with russia.

Conclusion , Globalisation is good but it create conflictes , The impact was vary country to country, The rised in technology is good but also ready to take bad conflicts as well even if through internet or trades.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing the impact of globalisation and providing an opinion, though the development is limited. While the student mentions both advantages and disadvantages, the arguments are somewhat superficial and lack depth. The example regarding India, Russia, and the US is relevant but is explained in a confusing manner, making it difficult to follow the logic. The position is present but could be more clearly articulated throughout the essay. To improve, the student should focus on expanding each point with clearer reasoning and more coherent examples to ensure the reader fully understands the perspective being presented.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is frequently disrupted by awkward phrasing and a lack of cohesive devices. Transitions between sentences are often missing or misused, such as the abrupt shift in the second paragraph from internet access to trade. The use of referencing is inconsistent, making it hard to track the flow of the argument. While there is an attempt to use linking words like 'To begain with' and 'for example', these are often used incorrectly or placed awkwardly. Improving the use of transition signals and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would significantly enhance the coherence of the writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive, with several instances of incorrect word choice that hinder clarity. For example, 'insanly' is used instead of 'rapidly' or 'exponentially', and 'famous culture' is used instead of 'popular culture'. There are also issues with word forms, such as 'rised' instead of 'rise' and 'effected' instead of 'affected'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas precisely. To achieve a higher band, the student should work on using more academic collocations and ensuring that words are used in their correct grammatical form and context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with sentence structure, including run-on sentences and fragments. Subject-verb agreement is inconsistent, such as 'globalisation was measured' and 'countries has better connectivity'. Punctuation is also problematic, with commas used incorrectly or omitted where necessary. The range of structures is limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with some unsuccessful attempts at complex ones. A focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and correct punctuation is essential for improvement.

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