Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In recent years, through the internet, air travel, trade and popular culture, globalisation has rapidly increased. Many people believe that the increased interaction between nations through globalisation is a good thing.

Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

its often argued that the globalisation has rapidly increased through the internet, air travles ,trade population and the culture in recent years.some people believed that globalization is a good thing beacuse of it interaction between nations is increased .by gloablization peple can stay in contact easily so this is good factor contact .i firmly argued that globalization is a good thing beacuse we can intract with people whenever we need .

firstly ,i support my opinion by giving examples, people need of intraction with each other in any time ,part of life .so we can only get in touch with eachother by globalization .internet ,travelling ,national and international trade and culture increased globalization in very small period of time .social media .travelling and other common factores .through we can intract and stay in contact with our surroundings are plays crucial role in globaloization

secondly ,globalization is a good thing because it helps pepole to take healthy relationship with other people who may be lived in other place city or country .through trade for example international trade people helped globalization to increase becaues globalization grows with the help mof intraction and contact to other people so these factors for example air traveling trade ,popular culture and specificly internet and social media helped in increasing of intraction .

to sum up , globalization is a good and crucial thing to get in touch with the other people of any place .and this is only possible by some common factores for ecxample saminars .air travel ,national and international trade and popularity of culture .globalization also helps nations to increased relationship and intractions .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing the benefits of globalisation and providing a personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is limited and repetitive. While you mention factors like the internet and trade, the explanation of how these contribute to positive interaction is superficial. The arguments lack depth, and the essay relies on circular reasoning (e.g., stating globalisation is good because it increases interaction, which is good). To improve, you should provide specific, concrete examples of how globalisation has positively impacted a particular sector, such as education or healthcare, rather than repeating the same general points about 'staying in contact'.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow is often disrupted by awkward phrasing and repetitive sentence structures. While you use transition words like 'firstly' and 'secondly', the connection between ideas is sometimes mechanical or unclear. For instance, the transition between the introduction and the first body paragraph is abrupt. Referencing is occasionally confusing, such as in the sentence 'through we can intract and stay in contact with our surroundings are plays crucial role in globaloization', where the grammatical structure makes the intended meaning difficult to follow. Improving the use of cohesive devices to link sentences more fluidly would enhance the overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on basic terms like 'good thing' and 'interaction'. There are frequent spelling errors, such as 'travles', 'peple', 'intract', 'mof', and 'saminars', which occasionally impede readability. You attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'globalisation' and 'international trade', but the lack of variety and the persistent spelling issues restrict the range. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more precise synonyms and ensuring accurate spelling of key terms. Expanding your vocabulary to include more academic collocations would also be beneficial.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('globalisation has rapidly increased', 'people believed'), article usage, and sentence construction. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, such as 'its often argued that the globalisation has rapidly increased through the internet, air travles ,trade population and the culture in recent years.' The control of complex structures is weak, and errors are present in almost every sentence. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high density of errors requires the reader to work harder to follow your points. Focusing on basic sentence structure and punctuation is essential.

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