Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In recent years, through the internet, air travel, trade and popular culture, globalisation has rapidly increased. Many people believe that the increased interaction between nations through globalisation is a good thing.

Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In this contemporary era globalisation has become a contentious topic over the years. In today's modern world, through social media, modes of transportation, trade and popular culture, result in the increase of globalisation. Some of the individuals think that the interaction between countries through globalisation is beneficial. The positive aspects of globalisation along with my perspective will elaborated in the following paragraphs.

Out of all the benefits of globalisation, the predominant one to state is that it will create more employment opportunities. To explain this, it can elaborated that globalisation plays crucial role in the development of countries and also help to build the relationship to other nations which can potentially create vast number of job opportunities and can reduce the unemployment and poverty as they inter related to each other, for instance due to globalisation the country can work with other country for a business plan which increases employment among citizen. As a result, globalisation play very significant role for the economy of a country.

Apart from these other significant reason of globalisation is availability of resources ( good and services). To exemplify this perspective, it can be elaborated that imports and exports of good and services will increases due to which the people of a country can easily access foreign products, and also if there is a scarcity of goods, that can also solve by importing such goods from other countries. It can be inferred by an examples, it is commonly seen that if there is a scarcity of material in nation, to deal with this problem the nation can import such raw material from other nations.

To recapitulate, after analysing all the aforementioned it can be inferred that globalisation can be advantageous because it bring job opportunities and solve several problems like scarcity of goods. According to my perspective, I believe that globalisation plays vital role for country development and also for the society.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing the benefits of globalisation and providing a personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat repetitive and lacks depth. For example, the argument regarding employment opportunities is stated but not fully supported with specific, concrete examples beyond general statements. The position is clear, but the explanation of how globalisation specifically fosters business plans or reduces poverty remains superficial. To reach a higher band, you should provide more detailed, illustrative examples rather than repeating the same general points about 'job opportunities' and 'scarcity of goods'.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into clear paragraphs, and there is a logical progression of ideas. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'To exemplify this perspective' and 'To recapitulate'. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'Apart from these other significant reason of globalisation'. Additionally, some sentences are repetitive, which affects the flow. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph transitions smoothly into the next would enhance the overall coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'contemporary era', 'contentious topic', and 'scarcity'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'result in the increase of globalisation' (should be 'results in an increase') and 'they inter related to each other' (should be 'they are interrelated'). While your vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning, you need to focus on more precise word choices and correct collocations to move into the higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('globalisation play very significant role') and missing articles ('the country can work with other country'). Some sentences are also structurally incomplete or awkward, such as 'It can be inferred by an examples'. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your main points, they are frequent enough to limit the score. You should focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and article usage.

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