Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-09
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In recent years, through the internet, air travel, trade and popular culture, globalisation has rapidly increased. Many people believe that the increased interaction between nations through globalisation is a good thing.
Discuss this view and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
From many years of life, some people argue that globalisation has grow up fastly through the internet, air travel, trade and also by popular cultures. As in this way, many people believe that it is a best way to interact with different nations through globalisation.
From my daily experience of life, i think it is very great full to interact several nations under the source of technology such as internet, air travel and cultures as well.
Firstly, in recent years technology has been grow up sharply and find the advance steps. For example, in start computer is made by humans and then time to time add some functionalities in it and today computer has great technologies in field browsing travelling and for international trade markets as well. Now in this era we can easily communicate with different countries while we are in our own home.
Secondly, there are so many fields in technology such as artificial intelligence, machine learning, cloud computing, programming and also data science as well. people can toke their jobs in these fields which are reliable for both country economy and personal growth. For instance, people need money to spend their life and these can pay them more then they want and also better for their own development of learning.
From my daily affairs of life and experience. we have to learn basic and advance skill of technology if we want a great career in life and make country relations better with another countries. They can work for internet technology to upgrade into 5G, 6G up to so on. In this way we can manage all other popular fields such as air travel, trade segments, and also communicate with unknown people of different culture as well.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing the benefits of globalisation, but the development is limited. While you provide a personal opinion, the arguments regarding technology and job markets are somewhat disconnected from the broader concept of globalisation. The essay lacks a clear, sustained focus on the 'interaction between nations' as requested by the prompt. The ideas are repetitive, and the connection between the examples (like 5G/6G) and the overall impact of globalisation remains underdeveloped. To improve, ensure each paragraph directly links back to how globalisation facilitates interaction between nations, rather than focusing solely on technological advancement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay uses basic cohesive devices such as 'Firstly' and 'Secondly' to structure the response. However, the progression of ideas is often unclear, and the logical flow between sentences is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs is weak, making it difficult for the reader to follow your argument. Referencing is sometimes ambiguous, and the transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is mechanical. To achieve a higher score, focus on using a wider range of linking words and ensuring that each sentence logically follows the previous one.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'great', 'good', and 'things', which restricts your ability to express complex ideas. There are several instances of incorrect word choice, such as 'grow up fastly' (should be 'grown rapidly') and 'great full' (likely meant 'grateful' or 'beneficial'). The use of 'toke' instead of 'take' and the repetitive use of 'technology' indicate a need for a broader range of synonyms and more precise collocations. To improve, practice using topic-specific vocabulary related to international relations and economic integration.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with verb tenses, such as 'has grow up' instead of 'has grown', and subject-verb agreement errors like 'computer is made'. Sentence structures are generally simple, and attempts at complex sentences often contain errors, such as 'people can toke their jobs... which are reliable for both country economy'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of lowercase 'i' and missing commas. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common tense and agreement errors.
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