Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In recent years, through the internet, air travel, trade and popular culture, globalisation has rapidly increased. Many people believe that the increased interaction between nations through globalisation is a good thing.

Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In previous years, uses of technology for varius purpose in life growing uo very fastly. Whereas,many individuals argue it is very benifical for whole over the world and i also agree with the statement.

Technology completely changed human life and living style as like, in past it was very difficult to communicate with each other and using possible ways it took a lot time. People send and receive letters to each others in history, However, from some past years after the inventions of different techonogies like internet and smart phones which makes more convinient and rapid to make conversation not only in a country, we can send and recieve sms and mails instantly anywhere anytime whole over the world. Morever, we can also make phone call to immidialtely transfer our message and also make video calls to deal face to face. We can captured pics and videos and share it on internet to explore our culture globally.

At the other hand, Technology also quitely changed our travelling way, As in past people use hourses and camels for travelling but this process was very slow it tooks months to reached any destinations but after arrivals of various vehicles and planes we can travel anywhere anytime only in minutes and houres. It makes human lives more cozy and good. I believe that after the invenetion of these things peole can do anything anytime. These are such a great things.

In conclusion, I particularly inspired and agree with statement and majority are on my side while minors are disagree.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response addresses the task partially by discussing how technology and globalisation have changed human life, touching upon communication and travel. However, the connection between these technological advancements and the specific prompt about globalisation and increased interaction between nations is only partially realised. Your position is stated in the introduction where you mention you agree with the statement, but the ideas remain limited and under-developed, relying on simple assertions rather than fully expanded arguments. To move to a higher level, you would need to explore both sides of the globalisation debate more thoroughly and provide well-supported arguments that directly tackle the prompt's core question regarding international interaction.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation present in your essay, with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, but there is no clear overall progression of ideas throughout the text. Cohesive devices are sometimes inaccurate or over-used, such as starting sentences with 'Whereas,' 'As like,' and 'At the other hand,' which sound unnatural and mechanical. Additionally, referencing is not always clear, and the paragraphing does not guide the reader smoothly from one point to the next. To improve cohesion, you should work on using a wider variety of accurate transition signals and ensure that each paragraph builds logically upon the previous one without abrupt shifts in topic.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your vocabulary range is limited and minimally adequate for expressing basic thoughts. There are noticeable errors in word choice, spelling, and word formation—such as 'varius' for various, 'fastly' instead of quickly, 'benifical' for beneficial, 'techonogies' for technologies, 'convinient' for convenient, 'immidialtely' for immediately, and 'captured' instead of capture—that cause some difficulty for the reader. You attempt to use some less common words, but frequent lexical inaccuracies impede smooth reading. To reach a higher standard, you need to focus on precise word choices, correct word forms, and accurate spelling of everyday academic vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

Your writing displays a very limited range of sentence structures, and attempts at complex sentences are often faulty. There are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation that can cause difficulty for the reader, including issues with verb tenses and forms ('uses of technology... growing uo very fastly', 'it tooks months to reached'), missing or incorrect articles ('in past', 'after arrivals'), and faulty clause structures. Punctuation is also weak in places, with comma splices and run-on sentences. To improve, you should focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and reducing the frequency of grammatical errors in your simple sentences before attempting more complex structures.

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