Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In recent years, through the internet, air travel, trade and popular culture, globalisation has rapidly increased. Many people believe that the increased interaction between nations through globalisation is a good thing.

Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Nowadays, all over the world increasing fast pace life, majority of work running on by internet. because its make easy for work, like travel, goods, culture etc. Many people believe this thing is very useful for them to make easy life to survive. In my further paragraphs, I will be the same discussed.

Initiating, with the benefites, the first and foremost key benefit is that, by the internet people become more aware for their work on time, because they take help of internet, they can book ticket online through internet. For example, fight, bus, train, etc. Furthermore, now they do goods transportation by internet such as by the parcel its very convenient for traders, as well as they can online meeting face to face with overseas businessmen.

Moreover, in present era mainly people use internet fo communication with friends and familes and relatives from foreign. Similarly, in the past people have no any advance technology for develop their business, but now become very easy our life and its help us to grow our education its help us find the question answer in short time. My perspective internet is benificial for us develop our thought and help us to do for everything in our life.

In concusion, to the above statement, it is a bag of positives thoughts. Hence, the statement should not be underestimated. In todays, we all depend on internet because its lead us on right path to become luxury lifestyle across the globe.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You express a generally positive view of globalisation, mentioning online travel bookings, trade, communication with relatives abroad and access to educational information. These examples are relevant, but the response does not fully discuss the view in the prompt: it focuses mainly on the internet rather than the wider interaction between nations through air travel, trade and popular culture, and it gives little consideration to possible drawbacks or a developed explanation of why globalisation benefits society. Your position is present in phrases such as “My perspective internet is beneficial,” but it is not clearly stated and supported throughout. The response is also five words below the required minimum. Develop a clear opinion, explain each main reason, and connect examples directly to globalisation.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposting such as “Furthermore,” “Moreover” and “In conclusion” helps show the intended structure. However, progression between ideas is not always clear: the first body paragraph moves from booking tickets to parcel delivery and online meetings without explaining how these examples connect to increased interaction between nations. Some linking phrases feel mechanical, and references such as “this thing” and “the statement” do not identify the idea precisely. The conclusion repeats the general positive view rather than drawing together the reasons. Organise each paragraph around one central point, use clearer references, and make the links between examples explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “goods transportation,” “overseas businessmen,” “communication” and “technology.” However, the range is basic and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “increasing fast pace life,” “benefites,” “fight” where “flight” is intended, and “a bag of positives thoughts.” Repetition of “internet,” “easy” and “help” also limits precision. Build a topic vocabulary around international trade, travel, cultural exchange and communication, and check spelling and natural word combinations. More precise phrasing would make your relevant examples clearer and help you express your opinion with less repetition.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect ideas using clauses with “because,” “as well as” and “but,” and some simple sentences communicate the general point. However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and frequent errors in sentence formation, verb forms, articles and agreement can distort meaning. For example, “majority of work running on by internet” lacks a complete, correctly formed clause, while “people have no any advance technology” has problems with verb construction and noun phrasing. “It help us” also shows a subject–verb agreement error. Practise building accurate subject–verb sentences first, then add subordinate clauses. Check articles, verb forms and punctuation when editing, especially in longer sentences.

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