Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In recent years, through the internet, air travel, trade and popular culture, globalisation has rapidly increased. Many people believe that the increased interaction between nations through globalisation is a good thing.

Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Globalisation has been increased over the years with the introduction of new technologies. The modern world is socializing with the help of social media, tourism, trade and and popular culture. A lot of people believe that the increased interaction between nations through globalisaion has a positive impact.

I also believe it is a good thing, knowing people from overseas, learning about new cultures, all these things together contributes to overall development of the country.

Globalisation builds better relationship between countries and its people. Internet provieds us a service by which we can connect to people from all arount the world, it provide us facilities by which we can learn about other traditions and explore other cultures. In addition, it provides different platforms where people from different part of the world come together and have a friendly conversation. Air travel has also contributed significantly, it saves time and allow people to visit different countries. Trade on the other hand contributed most in building a healthy relationship between countries, because it allows to sharing goods to all over the world and also bring the necessary goods. Lastly, pop culture has make people connect emotionally, which is one of the best way to build emotional connections to each other and it also make understanding other cultures more fun and enjoyable.

In conclusion, every aspect of globalisation has made an significant contribution. It made the socialisation easier and provides equivalent opportuanities for everyone. It has made a better society all over the world where people can live their life at fullest.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You state a clear opinion in favour of globalisation and discuss several relevant forms of interaction, including the internet, air travel, trade and popular culture. The examples about learning traditions and sharing goods help address the topic. However, most points are asserted rather than explained in depth: for instance, the claim that trade builds healthy relationships would be stronger with a specific example or explanation of how this happens. The conclusion also makes broad claims about equal opportunities and a better society without supporting them. The response is 248 words, so it does not meet the 250-word minimum; the nine words copied from the task prompt were not counted. Develop fewer points more fully and support your position with a concrete example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph presenting reasons, and a conclusion. Sequencing expressions such as “In addition,” “on the other hand,” and “Lastly” help signal the movement between points. However, the main body places several different arguments in one long paragraph, so the progression can feel like a list rather than a developed discussion. Some links are also unclear or mechanically added; “on the other hand” suggests a contrast, although the sentence about trade continues the positive case. The conclusion repeats the general position rather than drawing together the reasons. Use separate paragraphs for related ideas and choose linking phrases that accurately show the relationship between them.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “globalisation,” “traditions,” “trade,” and “emotional connections,” and the reader can generally understand your intended meaning. However, the range is limited and some word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which makes parts of the response less natural. Examples include “socializing” for interaction between nations, “sharing goods to all over the world,” and “made a better society.” There are also noticeable spelling errors, such as “globalisaion,” “provieds,” and “opportuanities.” Aim for more precise topic vocabulary and check spelling carefully. For example, describe trade as enabling countries to exchange goods, and use “foster stronger relationships” rather than “build better relationship.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including a sentence beginning “because it allows…” and a concluding sentence with a relative clause. However, errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence construction occur frequently enough to make the writing less controlled. Examples include “Globalisation has been increased,” “all these things together contributes,” and “it provide us facilities.” In “Air travel … saves time and allow people,” the verbs do not agree with the singular subject. The opening fragment, “I also believe it is a good thing, knowing people from overseas…,” also needs a clearer grammatical connection between the ideas. Practise checking each sentence’s subject and verb, and use a wider range of accurate complex structures.

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