Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In recent years, through the internet, air travel, trade and popular culture, globalisation has rapidly increased. Many people believe that the increased interaction between nations through globalisation is a good thing.

Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In recent times,internet had played a vital role in air travel, trading and exchnaging cultutre aroud the universe in very short time. As in presnt times techonloyg had take over and internet is one of the example which revealed us globalvillige.

The internet has made a lot of changes for a humans because it has made our trade very easy through mobile phones.However, the internet has made our bussiness very easy with different countries therefore we import a lot of this from china and japans. As from japan we imports car parts through internet.And from china we are importing tyres and clothes bcause the have a lot factrioes and they have expert employes.

The internet had made a vital role in our life and it had made our life more easier because there are a lot app throght wihich we are booking our flights. This internet has given alot og things like advertising our culture through social media like we have tiktok and diffrent plate from to present our culture.this social media has made our connection with foreign about trade and and air travel and popular culture.However the china and UK are found of our culture because our culture is full of respect and has alot of beauty in it.The internt has made our bussness so essy and profitabale beacuse not going to china or diffrent country and this internet has made easy and made very comfortable.

In conclusion i am very found of internet because this internet has made our talk easy and give a vital role.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response is relevant to globalisation and gives examples involving trade with China and Japan, air travel, and social media. It also expresses a positive view in the conclusion: “i am very found of internet.” However, the task asks you to discuss the view that increased interaction between nations is beneficial and give your own opinion. Most of the response lists ways the internet is useful, rather than explaining the wider effects of interaction between nations or considering the view in a developed way. The examples of importing car parts, tyres, and clothes are relevant, but their benefits are not clearly explained. State your position directly in the introduction, then develop two or three reasons with specific explanations and examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is some paragraphing, and the response moves from trade to travel and culture before reaching a conclusion. Basic linking words such as “However,” “therefore,” and “In conclusion” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, the progression is difficult to follow because several points are crowded into long paragraphs, and connections between sentences are often unclear. For example, the shift from booking flights to advertising culture and then to China and the UK’s appreciation of “our culture” is not explained. Repetition of “the internet has made” also makes the response feel list-like. Give each body paragraph one main idea, use clear topic sentences, and explain how each example supports that idea.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “air travel,” “trade,” “import,” “advertising,” and “popular culture,” so the reader can identify the general subject. However, the range is basic and repetitive, with “internet” and “made” used repeatedly instead of more precise expressions. Several spelling errors, including “exchnaging,” “cultutre,” and “bussiness,” make the writing harder to read. Some word combinations are also unclear, such as “found of our culture” and “a lot of this from china.” Build a more accurate range for discussing international connections, and check spelling and collocations carefully. More precise vocabulary would help communicate the intended benefits and examples.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple and joined sentences, for example, “The internet has made a lot of changes for a humans because it has made our trade very easy.” However, control is weak across the response, and frequent errors sometimes make relationships between ideas unclear. Verb forms and tense are inconsistent: “internet had played,” “techonloyg had take over,” and “we imports” do not use appropriate forms. There are also problems with articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries, as in “for a humans” and “the have a lot factrioes.” Try to form accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses with “because” or “which.” Check subject–verb agreement, verb tense, articles, and punctuation when editing.

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