Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In recent years, through the internet, air travel, trade and popular culture, globalisation has rapidly increased. Many people believe that the increased interaction between nations through globalisation is a good thing.

Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Todays, in recent years, through the internet,air travel, trade and popular culture, globalisation has rapidly increased. Some humans think that the increased interraction between nations through globalisation is a good thing. In my opinion this eassy is significant but many disadvantage with the this eassy because internet, air travel, trade and popular culture, globalisation has rapidly inceased althoug globalisation has high level devloped but culture, language, treditional clothes it is getting lost.

On the one hand, globalisation has significant. Firstly, humans are problam with the solving by travel and they went to eassyly several placess. Furthermore, and trending and unque language was speaked than this is a verry good with culture. Example: late for traveling period than this time you are eassy for this time and they learn to nes skills, new culture and helping by internet they called by many placess.

On the other hand, globalisation had bad effect with our culture. Secondaly, they language, skills, netional clothes, transportation many thing they are disappear and they do not memories with culture, language they are busy to globalisation than this time all skills has gone.

In conclusion, in my opinion this is a good but this think is bad effect with cultura and they are not significant with trade and popular because culture has loss and language, netional clothes, transportation, reputatin has loss with globalisation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You address the topic by presenting both a benefit and a concern: easier travel and learning about other cultures are mentioned, while the possible loss of language, clothing and traditions is your main objection. Your opinion is present, but it is difficult to follow consistently: you call globalisation “a good” thing, then emphasise its harmful effects without clearly weighing the two sides. The supporting points are also minimally developed; for example, the travel paragraph does not explain a specific benefit or give a clear example. The response is 192 words, below the required 250; 34 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. To strengthen the response, state your position clearly and explain each main point with a relevant example and its consequences.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph beginning “On the one hand,” a contrasting paragraph beginning “On the other hand,” and a conclusion. These markers help readers recognise the intended two-sided discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is difficult to follow because several ideas are crowded together or repeated, such as the references to culture, language and clothes in both the second body paragraph and conclusion. Some linking expressions are awkward or do not show a clear relationship, including “Furthermore, and” and “Secondaly.” The travel paragraph also moves between travel, language, culture and internet use without explaining the connections. Use one central idea per paragraph, order its explanation and example clearly, and use linking words only where they accurately express the relationship.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “globalisation,” “interaction,” “culture,” “traditional clothes” and “popular culture,” and you try to discuss both benefits and disadvantages. However, the range is basic and repetitive, with “culture,” “language” and “globalisation” recurring without much variation. Several spelling and word-choice errors make meaning harder to understand, such as “interraction,” “eassyly,” “nes skills” and “reputatin.” Some combinations are also unclear, for example “globalisation has significant” and “bad effect with our culture.” Build a small set of accurate topic phrases and check spelling and collocations. More precise wording would help you explain the effects of international contact rather than relying on repeated general terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including a contrast introduced by “although” and a sentence beginning “Furthermore.” However, sentence structures are very limited in control, and frequent errors sometimes obscure the intended meaning. Examples include “globalisation has significant,” which lacks a suitable complement, and “they language, skills … many thing they are disappear,” where the sentence structure and agreement are unclear. Verb forms are also problematic in “language was speaked” and “all skills has gone.” Punctuation and sentence boundaries need attention, particularly in the long opening sentence and the travel paragraph. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add one clear subordinate clause at a time, checking verb forms, articles and plural agreement.

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