Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Concern for the environment is growing rapidly and more and more people are choosing to be 'eco-tourists' - travelling in responsible, environmentally-friendly ways. As a result, the eco-tourism industry is expanding.

To what extent do you think this is a positive trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is often argued that, people choosing to be 'eco-tourists' are spreading positivity, which results in expansion of eco-tourism industry.

It is widespread that, as environment is expanding on a large scale, more people prefer to be eco-tourists i.e travelling to different areas in a responsible and ecofriendly ways. Many tourists are exploring the hidden and fragile areas of the nature and reprsents it in such a beautiful scenic views. In past few years, I also used to be an 'eco-tourist'. In my vlogs, I discovered many areas which were not discovered by majority of the influencers. The rich culture and people fascinated me a lot. I also grabbed spectators attention towards the environment and travelling responsibly without affecting the beauty of those areas.

Moreover, one of the place I witnessed was "Kimari" located in Karachi near the Qasim port. People used to travel through boats and ships. The inhabitants did fishing to meet their daily life expenses. This spreads positivity to the viewers, that how people live in such areas utilizing their own resources for survival.

Furthermore, we cannot neglect its drawbacks. This profession requires a lot of investment for shooting equipments, travelling, food, clothes and many more. This leads to expansion in eco-tourism industry which is affecting the business. As, everyone is indulging in this industry which results in low income.

To conclude,I think to some extent this trend is positive. Although it has demerits, but we cannnot neglect its positive areas to be eco-tourists. This is also beneicial for environment's expansion.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear, if qualified, view in the conclusion: “to some extent this trend is positive,” and you include personal experience as an eco-tourist and an example from Karachi. These details make the response relevant to the topic. However, the discussion only partly answers whether the expanding industry is a positive trend. The benefits are mainly illustrated through your vlogs and the inhabitants’ way of life, without explaining clearly how eco-tourism protects the environment or benefits local communities. The drawback about investment and low income is also difficult to follow and is not fully connected to the question. Develop two or three relevant reasons, explain their effects, and make your position clear throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, supporting paragraphs, a drawback, and a conclusion. Paragraphs beginning “Moreover” and “Furthermore” signal a change of point, and the personal example gives the discussion some progression. However, the overall line of argument is not consistently clear: the paragraph about filming costs and low income does not explain how these outcomes relate to the environmental trend. Some linking is mechanical, and the conclusion repeats the positive-versus-negative contrast rather than drawing the main reasons together. Use topic sentences that state each paragraph’s central claim, then connect examples explicitly to that claim. Clearer references between ideas would also help readers follow the argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “eco-tourists,” “fragile areas,” “inhabitants,” and “utilizing their own resources,” which helps communicate the subject. There is also an attempt to use less common expressions such as “grabbed spectators attention.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unclear, including “environment is expanding,” “represents it in such a beautiful scenic views,” and “positive areas to be eco-tourists.” Spelling errors such as “reprsents,” “equipments,” and “beneicial” are noticeable, and some wording is repetitive. Aim for precise phrases that express the intended meaning, and check spelling and natural word combinations when editing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple statements and longer sentences, including clauses introduced by “which” and “although.” However, complex sentences are often not controlled accurately, and errors occur frequently enough to make some points harder to understand. For example, “one of the place I witnessed” has a number-agreement problem, while “Although it has demerits, but…” combines contrasting structures incorrectly. Articles and sentence punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “the expansion of eco-tourism industry” and “To conclude,I think.” Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a clearly connected supporting clause, then check articles, agreement, and punctuation. This will make your ideas easier to follow.

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