Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Concern for the environment is growing rapidly and more and more people are choosing to be 'eco-tourists' - travelling in responsible, environmentally-friendly ways. As a result, the eco-tourism industry is expanding.

To what extent do you think this is a positive trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Due to technology advancement, people are more responsible nowadays. The growing trend of environment protection are seen more often now as comapred to past. People now prefer eco-friendly ways to help protect environment. I completely agree with this notion and I will discuss this in the upcoming paragraphs.

To commence with, people now choose their decision wisely to protect the environment for future generation. For this people while on vacation plan to do eco friendly activities like use of electric car, car share and room share. All these things helps to reduce the fuel consumption, air pollution, power consumption. Also, some people donate the funds to the wildlife conservation department to protect the rare spices.

Moreover, the eco-tourism industries helps to plan everything paperless which eliminate the traditional way of bookings. Now there is no need to go and struggle in finding hotel, paying higher price at last minute. It helps to save trees as well because everything is paperless and stored in computer. Some of the tourist places donate the share of their profit to run the environment protection plan.

To conclude, technology play a pivotal role in creating environment awareness. The toruism industries helps to solve the growing concern of environment. There are some of the positive development which can be seen everywhere especially on the tourist places like car-share, room share, electric car and paperless technology helps people to save their time, money and enjoy while paying less. Last but not least protecting environment is a joint responsibility not an individual.

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response6.0
Coherence and Cohesion6.0
Lexical Resource5.5
Grammatical Range and Accuracy5.0
Overall5.5

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the introduction: “I completely agree,” and the response stays focused on whether eco-tourism is positive. You give relevant reasons, including reduced fuel use and pollution, wildlife conservation, paperless bookings, and donations to environmental plans. These points address the task, but some are more fully explained than others. For example, the benefits of car-sharing and electric cars are named, while the link between room-sharing and environmental protection is not made clear. The discussion of paperless bookings also focuses partly on convenience and cost rather than explaining the environmental impact in depth. To strengthen the response, develop each main reason with a specific explanation or example and make the positive effects on the environment explicit throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs beginning with “To commence with” and “Moreover,” and a conclusion. This makes the main stages of your argument easy to identify. You also use linking expressions such as “Also,” “because,” and “To conclude.” However, some connections feel mechanical, and the progression within paragraphs is not always smooth. The first body paragraph moves from holiday choices to donations without explaining how the ideas relate. In the conclusion, several examples are repeated in a long sentence, which makes the final point less focused. Group related examples together and use clearer references to show how each detail supports the paragraph’s main idea.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of topic vocabulary, including “eco-friendly,” “fuel consumption,” “air pollution,” “wildlife conservation,” and “paperless.” These terms help communicate the subject, and some less common expressions show an effort to discuss environmental issues specifically. However, word choice and collocation are sometimes inaccurate or repetitive: “rare spices” appears to mean rare species, “environment protection” is repeated, and “paying less” does not clearly express the intended benefit. There are also spelling errors such as “comapred” and “toruism.” Aim for more precise, natural phrases and check spelling carefully. For instance, use “environmental protection,” “rare species,” and “contribute a share of their profits.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more developed sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “because” and “which,” and your meaning is generally understandable. However, errors in agreement, articles, and sentence construction occur across the response. For example, “The growing trend … are seen” should use a singular verb, while “All these things helps” should use a plural verb. In “the eco-tourism industries helps,” the subject and verb also do not agree. Some sentences are awkwardly formed, such as “people now choose their decision wisely,” and the final sentence joins several ideas without clear grammatical control. Practise checking each sentence’s subject and verb, and build longer sentences around one clear main clause.

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