Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Concern for the environment is growing rapidly and more and more people are choosing to be 'eco-tourists' - travelling in responsible, environmentally-friendly ways. As a result, the eco-tourism industry is expanding.

To what extent do you think this is a positive trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Nowadays the world is moving towards sustainable and eco-friendly means of doing things to reduce the negative impact on the environment. Eco-tourism is one the industries gaining popularity and I believe this is a positive trend.

Tourism is a profitable industry in most countries. People travel from various countries to experince different cultures and visit places for sightseeing. In the process of this, there can be some activities which are not good for the environment.

For instance, the use of old-fashioned trains as means of transportation for tourists in Zimbabwe, from city to city. While it is an exciting experience, it also emits gases which result in air pollution ultimately contributing to global warming. If people shift to electric trains, they can still tour various cities while preserving the environment.

One of the notable and commendable developments in Zimbawe, is putting airports in popular tourist sites. This encourages people to travel faster and conviniently instead of using road networks. Most people who tend to travel long distances by road tend to use the bushes as toilets, which negatively impacts the environment and the wildlife.

To conclude, the transition to eco-tourism is a good adaption and a positive trend. As the world is moving towards sustainability, its worth adapting in all countries. This will also help to curb the effects of global warming, resulting in an environmentally friendly world which is safe for humans and the animals. This will in turn boost the economy, as most tourists will be visiting the countries which promote eco-friendly means.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear from the introduction: you consider the growth of eco-tourism a positive trend, and the conclusion restates this view. You give relevant examples, including replacing old trains with electric ones and reducing road travel. However, the response does not consistently explain how these examples represent responsible, environmentally friendly tourism. The airport example, in particular, is presented as beneficial because it makes travel faster, but the environmental effects of building airports or flying are not considered. The point about people using bushes as toilets also needs clearer support and connection to eco-tourism. Develop each example by explaining its environmental impact and showing how it supports your position; this would make the response more fully address the question.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and the ideas generally follow a sensible order. Linking phrases such as “For instance” and “To conclude” help signal examples and the ending. However, progression within the body paragraphs is sometimes unclear: the discussion moves from old trains to electric trains, then to airports and roadside toilets without fully explaining the links between these points. Some connections are also mechanical, particularly the repeated use of “This will” in the conclusion. Use topic sentences to establish each paragraph’s main point, and add clearer explanations between examples so the reader can follow how each one demonstrates the benefits of eco-tourism.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for the topic, including “sustainable,” “negative impact,” “air pollution,” “global warming,” and “preserving the environment.” These choices make your main ideas clear, and you attempt some less common expressions such as “notable and commendable developments.” There are, however, several spelling and word-choice errors, including “experince,” “Zimbawe,” and “conviniently.” Some phrases are also imprecise or unnatural, such as “one the industries” and “a good adaption.” Aim for accurate spelling and more natural collocations, and choose vocabulary that describes environmental benefits precisely. This would strengthen the range you already show without making the writing less clear.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including a conditional structure in “If people shift to electric trains, they can still tour various cities” and a relative clause in “Most people who tend to travel long distances by road…”. Meaning is generally clear, and some sentences are controlled well. Some grammatical errors remain, however. For example, “One of the notable and commendable developments in Zimbawe, is…” has an unnecessary comma separating the subject from its verb, while “its worth adapting” needs the possessive form “it’s.” The opening phrase “In the process of this” is also awkwardly constructed. Review punctuation around subjects and verbs, contractions, and sentence phrasing to improve accuracy while continuing to use varied structures.

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