Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Concern for the environment is growing rapidly and more and more people are choosing to be 'eco-tourists' - travelling in responsible, environmentally-friendly ways. As a result, the eco-tourism industry is expanding.

To what extent do you think this is a positive trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The steps taken to protect enviroment and travelling in responsible, enviroment- friendly ways has transcended over the past few years and substantial amount of people are choosing to be eco-tourist, resulting in expandation of eco-tourism industry throughout.

At the beginnig of this period, there were numerous issues with enviroment.People were not much concerned and responsible before.Isuues like littering were on the peak. People who used to travel in mountain or near the nature used litter plastic bags and bottles which makes the enviroment worst and inhabitable.If people use to camp near any river or in mountain used to spoil it by making wildlife disturbed. The issues can be resolved if people are more concerned about the nature.However, over the period the commuters became concerned and foster their responsiblity towards the nature as a result eco tourism transcends.Example; the Govt. has taken numerous steps to avoid littering by making it finable leads in increase of eco tourism industry.

Despite this concerns, the long term benefits of such trends are considerably more significant. The eco-tourism leads the nation, having clear mountain,river and cities moreover which leads in expanding to tourism throghout the world. Eco-tourism will also help country to spur their GDP leading to viable country. Eco-tourism also helps the country to protect their wildlife increasing the tourist attraction and a lifefull nature.Example; Swizerland has the highest tourist attraction beacuse of its eco friendly nature, which also lead to develpment and increase in gdp of the country. Making it the perfect example of ec -tourism.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You take a generally positive position, especially in the statement that the long-term benefits are “considerably more significant,” and you give relevant points about reducing litter, protecting wildlife, and supporting tourism and GDP. However, the response only partly develops the question of whether the trend is positive: the first body paragraph focuses largely on past environmental problems and how concern has changed, rather than explaining the benefits of eco-tourism. Some claims, such as its effect on GDP and Switzerland’s tourist appeal, are asserted without much explanation or specific support. To strengthen the response, make your position explicit in the introduction and develop each main benefit through a clear explanation and a relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an introduction followed by two body paragraphs, and the second paragraph clearly signals a contrast with “Despite this concerns.” This gives the reader some overall organisation. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven: the first moves from past littering to wildlife disturbance, then to government fines and industry growth without clearly connecting each step. Linking expressions such as “as a result” and “moreover” are sometimes used mechanically or do not show the relationship precisely. Referencing is also unclear in phrases such as “which also lead to development,” where the subject is difficult to identify. Use a clearer sequence—position, reason, explanation, example—and make links between claims explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “eco-tourism,” “wildlife,” “littering,” “viable,” and “responsibility,” and some choices show an effort to express environmental and economic ideas. However, the range is limited and several noticeable spelling, word-form, and collocation errors make parts difficult to understand, such as “expandation,” “foster their responsiblity,” “a lifefull nature,” and “the highest tourist attraction.” Repetition of “eco-tourism” and “country” also limits flexibility. Build a more accurate set of phrases for describing environmental protection and economic benefits, and check spelling and natural word combinations. For example, describe a country as “attracting large numbers of visitors” rather than having “the highest tourist attraction.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including conditional language (“The issues can be resolved if people are more concerned”) and a relative clause (“which also lead to development”). However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries can make meaning difficult to follow. For example, “The steps … has transcended” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “People who used to travel … used litter” has an incomplete verb pattern. Several sentences also run together without appropriate punctuation, as in “environment.People.” Practise building accurate sentences around one main idea, then add subordinate clauses only when their grammatical links are clear.

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