Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-07-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Concern for the environment is growing rapidly and more and more people are choosing to be 'eco-tourists' - travelling in responsible, environmentally-friendly ways. As a result, the eco-tourism industry is expanding.

To what extent do you think this is a positive trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Numbers of people are visiting to different travelling areas and choosing Eco tourist .they travel in a friendly way ,i am largely agree this is a positive trend . my opinion is that those who travel with Eco tourist may have good mindset because they do not spoil the areas where they travelling .they take care of the cultures and traditions and people of travelling areas .on the other hand , the persons who travel alone or groups they are less sharp than the Eco tourist . As a result ,many people see that they persons are very different from others because they live peacefully in these areas and meets with the other countries people with politeness .this exclusive habit enhance their personality and comparative to other persons . To be specific it is helpful for the Eco-tourism industry because it enlarge the services and management of the industry ,people travelled more and more due to the hype and popularity of the industry and their good traveller habits . but the main purpose is that we give knowledge to other persons who travel to other areas and do not care about the civilization and culture of the areas . The particular reason of this circumstance is we should change our people daily life affairs ,habits ,manners and other things that if our residence visit other areas ,we should highlights from others .

in short , I would to say that the people who are choosing '' Eco-tourist '' is on the way of heaven ,i agree this is a positive trend . on the other hand , it will be the sufficient for the Eco tourism industry as well .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by expressing a clear position that eco-tourism is a positive trend. However, the development of ideas is limited and often repetitive. While you mention that eco-tourists have a 'good mindset' and respect local cultures, the explanation remains superficial. The argument regarding the industry's growth is also underdeveloped, lacking concrete examples or a deeper analysis of the environmental or economic impacts. To improve, you should focus on providing specific, well-supported arguments rather than repeating the same general points about 'good habits' and 'personality'. The response is somewhat disjointed in its reasoning, which prevents it from reaching a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay lacks a clear structure, with ideas presented in a single, dense paragraph. There is a lack of logical progression between sentences, making the argument difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the repetitive use of 'on the other hand' which does not accurately reflect the relationship between your points. Referencing is often unclear, particularly when you refer to 'they persons' or 'the industry'. To improve, you must use clear paragraphing to separate your introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion, and use a wider variety of linking words to connect your ideas logically.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is basic and often imprecise. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'visiting to different travelling areas' instead of 'visiting different destinations' and 'on the way of heaven' which is an inappropriate idiom in this context. You rely on simple, repetitive language like 'good' and 'people'. While you attempt to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'eco-tourism' and 'civilization', the overall range is limited. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and collocations, and avoid informal or awkward phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'many people see that they persons are'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or fragmented, and punctuation is often misused, particularly with spaces before commas. The range of grammatical structures is limited, with a heavy reliance on simple sentences. To improve, you need to focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree, and practicing the correct use of complex sentences to demonstrate a wider range of grammatical control.

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