Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-07-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Concern for the environment is growing rapidly and more and more people are choosing to be 'eco-tourists' - travelling in responsible, environmentally-friendly ways. As a result, the eco-tourism industry is expanding.

To what extent do you think this is a positive trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Environment is very important for us humans and other living creatures in the world. It is a very much good to know that people are more aware and have concerns about our planet earth in this days. In my opinion, it is very positive trend and has positive effects for us in the near future. As my for self as tourist, eco-tourists' rather, i always choose to be environmentally friendly and to be responsible tourist while traveling to different places. For instant, instead of buying a lot of bottled water, I always bring my tumbler to lessen of using plastic and also I always make sure to recycle all my waste and put it in the right bin and not to throw just anywhere. And another example is that I always use organic or vegan cosmetics that has coral protection products most especially sun block if Im travelling by beaches and swim in the ocean for not to harm the corals in the ocean and destroy the little fish habitat.

As a tourism graduate, I am very delightful that the people are more attentive for the sustainability for the environment and learning hoe to protects the earth. Starting to learn or having a knowledge even by little by little it has a great effects for our loving Mother Earth. And this days a lot of companies have concerns for the environment. Other companies, they are changing or improving their packaging of their product into eco friendly materials. I hope that us people continuing to be more active in taking a good care for the earth so that the future generation will have a better life, air and environment to live in.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses the prompt by expressing a clear position that the rise of eco-tourism is a positive trend. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you provide personal examples, such as using a reusable tumbler and organic cosmetics, the essay lacks a broader analysis of the industry's impact. To reach a higher band, you should balance personal anecdotes with more general arguments regarding the economic or environmental implications of this trend. The ideas are relevant, but they remain at a personal level rather than exploring the 'extent' of the trend in a more academic or analytical manner.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organised into two paragraphs, which is a logical structure. There is a clear attempt to use cohesive devices, such as 'For instant' (intended as 'For instance') and 'And another example'. However, some transitions are repetitive or slightly mechanical, and the flow between sentences is occasionally interrupted by grammatical issues. The paragraphing is sufficient, but the progression of ideas could be smoother. Using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'in addition to') would help improve the logical flow and cohesion of your arguments.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'sustainability', 'environmentally-friendly', and 'habitat'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'very much good to know', 'I am very delightful', and 'learning hoe to protects'. These errors occasionally hinder the natural flow of the text. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and ensuring that adjectives and verbs are used in their correct forms. Expanding your range to include more precise, academic vocabulary would also be beneficial.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures. While there are attempts at complex sentences, they are often marred by grammatical inaccuracies, such as 'in this days', 'lessen of using', and 'for not to harm'. Subject-verb agreement and preposition usage are inconsistent throughout the text. To achieve a higher score, you need to demonstrate better control over complex grammatical structures and reduce the frequency of basic errors. Focusing on sentence variety and proofreading for common mistakes like pluralisation and article usage will significantly improve your accuracy.

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