Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-15
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Concern for the environment is growing rapidly and more and more people are choosing to be 'eco-tourists' - travelling in responsible, environmentally-friendly ways. As a result, the eco-tourism industry is expanding.
To what extent do you think this is a positive trend?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
People like to visit eco-enviroment, and now days eco-tourists rapidly grow and public are chosing to be eco-friendly travelling in ressponsible, and the out comes of the eco-tourism industry is successful.
people want relax so, current time citizens would like to go on natural places, people don't choose noice locations moreover, Tourist desires are to watch natural beauty rather than artificial area so, therefore the eco-tourism is tend, and mostly individuals go on rivers, forest, and mountains. They don,t like rush points, and on the other hand they want to maintain their fitness furthermore, they want explore the facts about this world. Eco-tourism are mostly would like to be alone, they want to connected with previous zone. whenever, we go on mountains so, we can feel the fresh air, and we can see all the view on the top.
From my prespective, this trend is positive, this is best way for enjoyment, and we can feel this world through the views of eco-enviroment. Basically it's depend on tourists, some of them would like to observe hand made points for instance, buildings, museums, and light decorations but in contrats, some of them would enjoy the simple locations such as, oceans, trees, and flowers. Now time touists are living in a advance world, so they are feel boring, and they want old memories, Some time before when technology was not exist in this world that, time many of tourists were waiting for new developments, but now every thing is available, as a result tourists want to analyse, and they want to observening past time.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing the trend of eco-tourism and expressing a positive view. However, the development of ideas is limited. While you mention that people prefer nature over artificial areas, the explanation remains superficial and lacks specific examples or logical depth. The argument that people are 'bored' with the modern world and seek 'old memories' is a relevant point, but it is not fully explored or connected back to the environmental impact of the industry. To improve, you should provide more concrete reasons why this trend is positive, such as economic benefits for local communities or the preservation of biodiversity, rather than focusing primarily on the personal preferences of tourists.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, which helps the overall structure. However, the progression of ideas is often disjointed. You use some cohesive devices like 'moreover', 'furthermore', and 'in contrast', but they are often used incorrectly or placed awkwardly within sentences, such as 'whenever, we go on mountains so, we can feel'. The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the flow between sentences is frequently interrupted by grammatical errors, making the text difficult to follow at times. To improve, focus on using transition words to link complete thoughts rather than just starting new clauses, and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'people', 'places', and 'things', and there are several spelling errors such as 'enviroment', 'ressponsible', 'noice', and 'prespective'. Some word choices are inaccurate, such as 'eco-tourism is tend' instead of 'a trend' or 'a growing trend'. While you attempt to use some topic-related vocabulary like 'eco-tourists' and 'natural beauty', the lack of precision and the high frequency of spelling mistakes hinder the clarity of your message. Expanding your vocabulary to include more precise adjectives and nouns related to environmental issues would significantly improve your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with sentence structure, such as run-on sentences and comma splices (e.g., 'people want relax so, current time citizens would like to go on natural places'). Subject-verb agreement is inconsistent, as seen in 'Eco-tourism are mostly would like to be alone'. Additionally, there are errors with articles, prepositions, and verb tenses throughout the text. The range of structures is limited to simple and often flawed complex sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subjects and verbs agree, and reducing the reliance on comma-heavy, run-on sentences.
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