Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Concern for the environment is growing rapidly and more and more people are choosing to be 'eco-tourists' - travelling in responsible, environmentally-friendly ways. As a result, the eco-tourism industry is expanding.

To what extent do you think this is a positive trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays the world is running in competitive environment it tends to the population to produce best products with low cost as a result pollution is increasing in many ways. But as as a responsible human being should consider the future generations and we should carefully uses the scare resources and keep remaining for our future generations.

As a result, the people are trying to use environmental friendly tourism for an instance, if the people are trying to move shorter places they mostly used bicycles. It is the best environmental friendly transport mode and cheapest. And also it is a good exercise for human but in rainy days it is not a suitable mode of transportation.

Out ancestors already used animals for transport options before the vehicle invention era but nowadays very rare to use animals as mode of transportation because it consumes more time.

The current world is using the new technologies for eco-friendly travelling. For instance, there are so many regulations enforced to protect the environment such as eco friendly test available during the production time if the test failure then the product won't be manufacture and also when considering the vehicle production, a huge concentration on the less carbon emissions and also in Sri Lankan contaxt each vehicle should pass the emissions testing to get the revenue license for vehicle. If the vehicle fails in emissions testing then it won't allow to get the vehicle revenue license. As a result the vehicle are not allowed to use the roads if the driver breaks the rules then there may be huge fines. This how the current world is more responsible for eco friendly traveling.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the topic of eco-tourism, but the development is inconsistent. While you mention the importance of environmental responsibility, the essay drifts away from the specific concept of 'eco-tourism' and focuses heavily on general vehicle emissions and transportation history. The prompt asks for your opinion on the expansion of the eco-tourism industry, but you do not clearly state or maintain a position on whether this is a positive trend. To improve, ensure that every paragraph directly relates to the prompt's core question rather than discussing general environmental regulations or historical transport methods.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. Transitions between ideas are often abrupt or missing, such as the sudden shift from bicycles to historical animal transport. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical, such as the repetitive use of 'As a result' to start sentences. Referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of your argument. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that connects back to your main argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for basic communication but lacks the precision and range required for a higher band. You rely on simple phrases like 'environmental friendly' and 'best products'. There are also some awkward collocations and word choice errors, such as 'running in competitive environment' and 'Sri Lankan contaxt'. To achieve a higher score, try to incorporate more sophisticated vocabulary related to environmental issues, such as 'sustainability', 'carbon footprint', or 'mitigation strategies', and ensure you are using words in their correct context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There is a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but the accuracy is inconsistent. You frequently make errors with articles ('the population', 'the vehicle'), subject-verb agreement, and sentence fragments. For example, 'if the test failure then the product won't be manufacture' contains multiple grammatical errors. Punctuation is also problematic, with several run-on sentences that lack proper conjunctions or full stops. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like verb tense consistency and article usage.

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