Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Concern for the environment is growing rapidly and more and more people are choosing to be 'eco-tourists' - travelling in responsible, environmentally-friendly ways. As a result, the eco-tourism industry is expanding.
To what extent do you think this is a positive trend?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The societal significance of concern for the environment is growing rapidly and more and more people are choosing to be 'eco-tourists' travelling in responsible, environmentally-friendly ways has become an increasingly contentious issue an contemporary academic public discourse.While proponets argue that its implementation offers substantial benefits, critics remain concerned about its potential adverse effects.This essay will crictically analyze both the positive and negative dimensions of this trend to reach a logical conclusion.
Primarily, there are several reasons to believe that travelling in responsible,environmentally-friendly ways serves as a catalyst for professional and social advancement.By fostering a more efficient environment,it enables individuals to achieve higher success rates and promotes healthy institutional development.For instance,empirical evidence suggests that integating this trend into modern systems enhances the overall productivity.Consequently, its role in driving progress is indi
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is severely underdeveloped and abruptly cut off at 130 words, falling well short of the 250-word minimum requirement. Because the length requirement was not met, a significant penalty must be applied to Task Achievement. Furthermore, the content struggles to maintain relevance to the specific prompt regarding eco-tourism, drifting instead into generic phrases about professional advancement, efficiency, and productivity such as 'serves as a catalyst for professional and social advancement'. While an attempt is made to introduce a critical analysis of the trend, the ideas are incomplete, truncated, and fail to sufficiently address the core concept of eco-tourism. Consequently, the task is only addressed in a minimal and fragmented fashion, capping the score at this level.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response shows some awareness of essay structure by attempting an introductory paragraph with a thesis statement and signaling body paragraph progression with transitional markers like 'Primarily'. However, the abrupt ending at 130 words prevents any real logical progression or conclusion from developing. Paragraphing is disrupted because the essay is cut off mid-sentence ('Consequently, its role in driving progress is indi'). Cohesive devices are used mechanically and some referencing is unclear or mismatched with the topic, such as abruptly linking eco-tourism to institutional development and productivity. While basic organizational features are present, the extreme brevity and incomplete nature of the text prevent the logical flow required for higher bands.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary demonstrates an attempt to use more formal academic phrasing, such as 'contentious issue', 'contemporary academic public discourse', and 'empirical evidence'. However, there are multiple mechanical errors and awkward word choices, including 'proponets' (spelling error for proponents), 'an contemporary' (article error), and 'integating' (spelling error for integrating). Furthermore, the collocations are frequently inappropriate for the topic of eco-tourism, as applying terms like 'professional and social advancement', 'institutional development', and 'success rates' to environmentally-friendly travel demonstrates a misunderstanding of how these terms collocate in context. The vocabulary is adequate to show some ambition, but spelling mistakes and inappropriate lexical choices restrict the score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, incorporating subordinate clauses such as 'While proponents argue that its implementation offers substantial benefits...'. However, control over punctuation and spacing is weak, with multiple spacing errors evident throughout the text (e.g., 'issue an contemporary', 'responsible,environmentally-friendly', 'environment,it'). There are also grammatical errors such as missing words or incomplete clauses, culminating in an unfinished sentence at the end of the text. While some complex structures are attempted, the high frequency of punctuation and spacing errors, combined with the incomplete text, heavily impacts the overall grammatical accuracy.
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