Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Concern for the environment is growing rapidly and more and more people are choosing to be 'eco-tourists' - travelling in responsible, environmentally-friendly ways. As a result, the eco-tourism industry is expanding.

To what extent do you think this is a positive trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This essay will discuss about the concern for environment which rising rapidly and a lot of people are choosing to be eco-tourists by travelling in responsible and environmentally-friendly ways. As the result, the eco-tourism industry is growing.

Tourism is a very big industry all over the world.And the concern about the environment is rapidly increasing because when people visit some places they make the environment dirty by throwing trash everywhere.It make the environment bad for humans,fishes,birds and animals.However, alot of people are choosing to be eco-tourist which is good because they are becoming responsible.People should always travel with responsibility and eco-friendly ways.The government should clean the tourist places on regular bases. So,the concern about the environment will decrease.

Eco-tourism industry is increasing and that is good for country economy.It will help a country to grow.Tourist visit different countries to explore their culture and traditions.Some visit to spend a quality time with their families or friends.It helps us to learn about different cultures and traditions of people all over the world.We should concern about environment but do not stop people in tourism.Government can tell tourist about the awareness of environment.Government can put banners on tourism places to aware people what to do and what do not do. That's how the environment will remain cleaned nor the tourism will stop.

In conclusion, this is positive trend because people are becoming eco-tourist and it is expanding eco-tourism industry.It will make a poor country financially stable.Despite this, the concern about the environment is also very important.We should keep our environment clean.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt by discussing whether the rise of eco-tourism is a positive trend, concluding that it is beneficial for both the environment and the economy. The position is clear throughout the essay. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive. For instance, the discussion on why tourism causes environmental damage ("they make the environment dirty by throwing trash everywhere") and why eco-tourism is good remains somewhat generalised and lacks deep extension. The candidate covers all parts of the task well enough to meet the criteria for Band 6, as the main features and a clear stance are presented, but further elaboration on specific examples would be required for a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay has a coherent overall arrangement with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a brief conclusion, fulfilling basic organizational requirements. However, paragraphing and cohesive devices show significant weaknesses. The second paragraph is quite long and crams multiple distinct ideas together, including environmental damage, personal responsibility, and government action. Furthermore, transitional markers are often missing, rudimentary, or incorrectly punctuated (e.g., "world.And the concern", "bases. So,the concern"), making the progression feel mechanical and disjointed in places. Referencing is also occasionally unclear. These limitations place the response firmly in the Band 5 category for this criterion.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The candidate demonstrates an adequate vocabulary range for the task, attempting topical terms such as "eco-tourists," "environmentally-friendly," and "financially stable." However, there are frequent inappropriate word choices and collocations that detract from precision, such as writing "discuss about" instead of "discuss," "tourist places" instead of "tourist destinations," "regular bases" instead of "a regular basis," and "aware people" instead of "raise awareness among people." While communication is rarely impeded, these lexical inaccuracies and the repetition of basic words mean the response does not fully achieve a Band 6, leaning slightly toward a Band 5 due to the noticeable frequency of word-choice errors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as conditional and modal structures ("People should always travel with responsibility...", "Government can tell tourist about the awareness..."). However, grammatical accuracy is weak, with frequent errors in articles, prepositions, verb forms, and plurals (e.g., "the concern for environment which rising rapidly," "It make the environment," "alot of people," "fishes" used for plural fish populations in this context, "cleaned" instead of "clean"). Punctuation and spacing errors are also prevalent throughout the text. Because errors occur frequently and occasionally cause slight difficulty for the reader, the writing aligns best with Band 5 descriptors.

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