Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Concern for the environment is growing rapidly and more and more people are choosing to be 'eco-tourists' - travelling in responsible, environmentally-friendly ways. As a result, the eco-tourism industry is expanding.
To what extent do you think this is a positive trend?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Nowadays, more and more people are becoming concerned about the environment and chosing eco-friendly ways to travel. As a result eco tourism is becoming popular. I belive that this is a positve trend because it can help protect environment and provide economic benefits to local communties.
Firstly, in term of eco-tourism protect the environment. eco-tourist travels with specific roles provided by tourism community included that keep the environment clean during traveling for instance, when tourists follow the roles that provided by the tourism communties like, during traveling tourists should focus on keep the environment clean now if travelers follow that rules as a result, environment will be clean. Furthermore, tourist are staying accommodation during traviling provided by tourism company for example, when tourist reached to their main spot they stay among the clean restaurants instead of tent or ground as a result, the spot look very clean.
Secondly, in term of economic benefits eco-tourism provide ways for businesses such as, restaurants, hotels, parks, and this development is very beneficial for local people such as they provide oportunties for local people to do jobs in Restaurants and hotels as a result loca peope can find job easily for instance, when you built a restaurant an a tourist spot it required a lot os staff therefore you should have to hired the staff as a result job market and economy may be boost.
In conclusion, Overall i believe that the expansion of eco-tourism is a positive development it can improve both the invironment and also economy.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing whether eco-tourism is a positive trend, focusing on environmental protection and economic benefits. A clear position is stated in the introduction ("I belive that this is a positve trend"). However, the development of ideas lacks clarity and depth. For instance, the explanation of how eco-tourists protect the environment becomes repetitive and convoluted, such as "now if travelers follow that rules as a result, environment will be clean." While the main ideas are relevant and all parts of the prompt are addressed, the arguments are under-developed due to circular reasoning and lack of specific, well-articulated examples. This performance aligns best with Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is attempted, though the division of ideas could be more logical. Cohesive devices are heavily overused and often misused, particularly transitional phrases like "as a result" and "for instance," which appear multiple times in a single sentence or clause (e.g., "for instance, when tourists follow the roles that provided by the tourism communties like, during traveling tourists should focus on keep the environment clean now if travelers follow that rules as a result, environment will be clean"). Paragraph progression is hindered by run-on sentences and repetitive cohesive markers, leading to an overall mechanical feel. This corresponds to a Band 5.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling and word-choice errors. Examples include misspellings such as "chosing," "belive," "positve," "communties," "oportunties," "loca peope," and "invironment." There is also inaccurate word formation and collocation, such as "roles" instead of "rules," "stay among the clean restaurants instead of tent," and "economy may be boost." While the writer attempts some less common vocabulary related to the topic, the numerous lexical errors and limited range restrict the score to Band 4.5, rounded to Band 5 for meeting minimal adequacy.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response shows a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most sentences are long, run-on complexes joined by commas and repetitive conjunctions rather than accurate subordination or coordination (e.g., "for instance, when you built a restaurant an a tourist spot it required a lot os staff therefore you should have to hired the staff as a result job market and economy may be boost"). Frequent errors in verb tense, modal usage, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions are present throughout the text. These frequent errors cause some difficulty for the reader and prevent the text from achieving a Band 6. Therefore, a Band 5 is appropriate.
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