Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-20
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Concern for the environment is growing rapidly and more and more people are choosing to be 'eco-tourists' - travelling in responsible, environmentally-friendly ways. As a result, the eco-tourism industry is expanding.
To what extent do you think this is a positive trend?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
It is widely recognized that people chossing to be an eco-tourists has become an integral aspect of contemporary society, prompting considerable debate regarding its broader implication. While a section of society contends that this trend yield a substantial advantages, other express valid concerns regarding its potential drawbacks. In my view the benefits of people becoming a eco-tourist has significantly outweighs its drawback due to maintaing the ecosystem and proventing harm to the land.
The mainly benefit of our young generation addopting eco-tourism that its help our tourism to grow further becaues when people did not make any mess it makes the places more beauitful. Furthermore more and more people become an eco-tourism less cleaning problem occure.Travling an enviormentally friendly makes you a responsible and pround person, you always do thing with clarity .In pakistan our new youth are adopting this trend to help our tourism grow, also it help to pervent the globel warming thats a big threat our world face today.
Some show conserns that it hard to enjoy when you become and eco-person. They say its state duity that they should do something about it not us. The solution of this problem that goverment and local persons maintain the order my applying fines and guiding new generation about eco-tourism.
In conclusion, although the people growning concerns about enviorment persent certain challenges that warrant careful consider but its overarching advantages remain undeniable. Provided apporpate measures required to address its downsides.The eco-tourism will continue to serve a valuable asset in our enviorment.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing whether the growing trend of eco-tourism is a positive development. A clear position is established in the introduction, stating that the benefits outweigh the drawbacks due to ecosystem maintenance. However, the development of ideas in the body paragraphs is limited, repetitive, and lacks depth or specific external examples beyond a brief mention of Pakistan. The reasoning tends to over-generalize, with vague assertions like 'when people did not make any mess it makes the places more beauitful.' While all parts of the task are addressed, the support remains underdeveloped, aligning closely with Band 5.0 descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into four paragraphs, showing an attempt at a standard argumentative essay structure. However, logical progression is frequently disrupted by awkward transitions, repetitive phrasing, and poor sentence linking. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as 'The mainly benefit' and 'Furthermore more and more people become an eco-tourism'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the mechanical repetition of ideas prevents a smooth flow of thought. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is weak. These features place the response firmly at Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary range is limited and frequently strained by persistent spelling and word-choice errors. Examples include 'chossing', 'implication', 'yield', 'addopting', 'becaues', 'beauitful', 'occure', 'Travling', 'enviormentally', 'pround', 'pervent', 'globel', 'conserns', and 'apporpate'. While the writer attempts less common topics related to environmentalism and tourism, the high frequency of basic lexical and morphological errors impedes understanding in several places, restricting the score to Band 4.5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, with frequent errors in tense, subject-verb agreement, and sentence construction. Examples of structural and grammatical flaws include 'people chossing to be an eco-tourists', 'this trend yield a substantial advantages', 'the benefits of people becoming a eco-tourist has significantly outweighs', and 'its hard to enjoy when you become and eco-person'. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex forms are consistently inaccurate. Errors occur throughout and frequently cause difficulty for the reader, fitting the Band 4.0 level.
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