Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-21
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Concern for the environment is growing rapidly and more and more people are choosing to be 'eco-tourists' - travelling in responsible, environmentally-friendly ways. As a result, the eco-tourism industry is expanding.
To what extent do you think this is a positive trend?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
IN RECENT YEARS, MORE PEOPLE ARE CONCERN ABOUT THE ENVIRONMENT AND INDIVIDUALS ARE CHOOSING TO BE ECO-TOURISTS IN A ENVIRONMENTALLY-FRIENEDLLY WAYS WHICH PROMOTOE ECO-TOURISM INDUSTRY. ALTHOUGH IT IS VERY POSITIVE TREND THAT YOUTH BECAME RESPONSIBLE TOWARD THEIR NATURE AND CONSIDERED IT AS A MAJOR ISSUE. HOWEVER, THIS ESSAY SHADE A LIGHT ON POSSIBLE REASONS AND POSITIVE IMPACT OF THIS CHANGE ON ENVIRONMENT AS WELL AS RESIDENTS LIFES.
THE FIRST AND FORMOST REASON BEHIND THIS AWARNESS IS NOW A PEOPLE MORE AWARE ABOUT ENVIRONMENT BECAUSE THEY HAVE ENOUGH KNOELEDGE ABOUT THE EXCESSIVE USE OF NATURAL RESOUCES AND HOW PRIVATE VEHICLES SUCH AS CARS, MOTORCYCLE AFFECTED THE ECO-SYSTEM SO, TO REDUCE THE CARBON FOOT THEY SHIFFTEDD THEIR RIDES TO VEHICLES WHICH ARE ENVIRONMENT FRIENDLY AND LEAVE NO FOOT PRINT. FOR INSTANCES, IN SEVERAL CONTURIES MOVING TOWARD CYCLING FOR THEIR DAY TO DAY WORKS AND ERANDES WHICH RESULT LESS CONSUMPTION OF ELECTRIC VEHLICES WHICH RESULTS INTO CLEAN ATMOSPHERE AND THEY ENJOY CLEAR AMBIENCE.
IN ADDITION, ECO-TOURIST IS QUITE CHEAPER AS COMPARE THE ELECTRIC ONE SO, IT REDUCE THE FINANCIAL BURDEN OF FUELS AND MAINTANENCE COST OF THE VEHICLES AS A RESULT INDIVIDUAL FEEL RELAX. MEANWHILE, HEALTH IS ESSENTIAL ISSUE BEHIND THIS LIKE IF A PERSON GO WITH BICYCLE , ONE CAN AUTOMATICALLY DONE THEIR PHYSICAL EXERCISE AND DO NOT NEED FOR EXTRA WORKOUT WHICH RESULT AS HEALTH IMPROVEMENT FOLLOWED BY NO HARFUL GAS SUCH AS CARBON EMISSION IS RELEASED AND ONE CAN BREATH IN FRESH AIR IT ALSO REDUCE THE CHANCES OF BREATHING ILLNESS.
TO CONCLUDE, I THINK PEOPLE MOVING TOWARD ECO-TOURISTES IS REMARKABLE MOVE TOWARD SAING THE ATMOSPHERE AND IT HAVE ONLY POSITIVE IMPACT ON ENVIRONMENT AS WELL AS LIVING ORGANISMS, IT CAN BE MORE ENCOURAGED BY THE RATIONAL APPROACH OF INDIVIDUALS AND GOVERNMENT.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing whether the rise of eco-tourism is a positive trend and providing reasons for this development. A clear position is maintained throughout, asserting that the trend is overwhelmingly positive for the environment and residents' lives. Ideas are extended and supported with examples, such as people shifting to cycling for daily errands to reduce carbon footprints. However, there is a tendency to over-generalise, and some arguments lack deeper elaboration or drift slightly from pure tourism into general environmental habits like commuting. Overall, the content sufficiently covers the prompt's requirements, earning a solid Band 6.5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organized into four paragraphs with a clear overall progression from introduction to body paragraphs and a conclusion. Logical sequencing is present, although the progression is occasionally disrupted by mechanical or faulty use of cohesive devices, such as 'THE FIRST AND FORMOST REASON BEHIND THIS AWARNESS IS NOW A PEOPLE MORE AWARE' and 'IN ADDITION, ECO-TOURIST IS QUITE CHEAPER'. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate distinct points, but referencing and transitional phrases can be repetitive or awkward, aligning the organizational quality with Band 6.0 descriptors.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary displays an adequate range for the task, with attempts to use less common items such as 'carbon footprint', 'eco-system', and 'ambience'. However, there are frequent spelling errors ('ENVIRONALLY-FRIENEDLLY', 'KNOELEDGE', 'CONTURIES', 'VEHLICES', 'SAING') and word-form inaccuracies ('ECO-TOURIST' used instead of 'eco-tourism', 'SHIFFTEDD', 'HARFUL'). While communication is maintained despite these errors, the high frequency of lexical and spelling mistakes prevents the response from reaching higher bands, placing it firmly at Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar is weak. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement and tense consistency, such as 'MORE PEOPLE ARE CONCERN' instead of 'concerned', 'A PEOPLE MORE AWARE', and run-on structures like 'AFFECTED THE ECO-SYSTEM SO, TO REDUCE THE CARBON FOOT THEY SHIFFTEDD THEIR RIDES'. Punctuation is also problematic, with missing periods and comma splices. Because these errors occur frequently and occasionally impede smooth reading, the grammar performance best fits the Band 5.0 descriptors.
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