Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-21
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Concern for the environment is growing rapidly and more and more people are choosing to be 'eco-tourists' - travelling in responsible, environmentally-friendly ways. As a result, the eco-tourism industry is expanding.
To what extent do you think this is a positive trend?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
It is irrefutable that nowadays enviornment is increasing fast and many individuals are selecting to be eco- tourists as well as nature friendly. In my opinion it is the positive statement to be more concern about nature and rise up in eco tourist. I will discuss the merits in this essay.
On the one hand in todays world people are love to see the mountanious regions valley green zone and eco friendly also. In others word greenary is the main body part of the enviornment and also people love to see the hilly areas , plants, many other things. However greenary is a part of enviornment and evey individual is love to keep the ecosystem clean . For instances a survey research that in india there were more than sixty five percentage trees were planted which is to be greeneast country in top tier. As a result we much keep or green zone clean and taking care for our natural beauty.
On the other hand travelling is responsible for exo-tourist and those who are eco-friendly are more likely to grown more plantation to keep air clean and greenary.To explain this in our places every tourist visit must keep our places clean and keep enviornment more clesn and greenary.
In conclusion every citizen is the first and formost duty is to keep enviornment clean and must take care of tourist as well as nature friendly.also
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The response attempts to address the prompt regarding the eco-tourism industry, but the position is somewhat unclear due to awkward phrasing such as 'it is the positive statement'. Ideas are heavily under-developed, repetitive, and lack clear support. Furthermore, the response suffers from a significant penalty because the length requirement is NOT met, as the student's response contains only 234 words against the mandatory 250-word minimum. This prevents a full exploration of the topic and limits task achievement to a lower band descriptor.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay attempts some basic paragraphing, separating the introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. However, the logical organisation and progression are weak throughout. Cohesive devices are either missing, inadequate, or repetitive, such as the constant use of 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand' without creating effective contrast or connection. Referencing is often unclear, leaving sentences disjointed and difficult to follow. For instance, phrases like 'To explain this in our places every tourist visit must keep our places clean' fail to link ideas coherently.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary range is limited and basic. The student makes frequent spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'enviornment' instead of environment, 'mountanious' instead of mountainous, and 'greenary' instead of greenery. There are also awkward collocations and vocabulary misuse, such as 'nature friendly' instead of nature-friendly or eco-friendly. While some topic-related words like 'eco-tourist' are attempted, the high frequency of basic errors and lexical limitations restrict the score to this band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying primarily on simple sentence structures with frequent attempts at complex sentences that are heavily flawed. There are constant issues with subject-verb agreement and basic sentence construction, such as 'people are love to see' and 'every individual is love to keep'. Punctuation and capitalization are also erratic, and errors frequently cause difficulty for the reader, though the general topic remains just about discernible.
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