Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Concern for the environment is growing rapidly and more and more people are choosing to be 'eco-tourists' - travelling in responsible, environmentally-friendly ways. As a result, the eco-tourism industry is expanding.

To what extent do you think this is a positive trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In the concurrent world, many people start doing responsible things to make the environment neat andd clean. I adhere to this point because this creates numerous good effects on society and other things related to echo system.

There are qdequate evidence of this around us in daily life but the top notch concrete proof is that by making the environment clean we can live a peaceful life. For instance, if we are travelling to somewhere and we find the paths neat and clean so it can affect all our mood because if we are going on the road filled with waste and other kind of dirt then it would cause bad affects for us because it creates a frustated environment between passangers because we have dirt all arond us which will cause delays because the traffic can get stuck in that and besides this whenever in our family or relative try to visit that kind of place we will suggest them to be at home instead of going to that contaminated area. However, it will effect the overall tourism in different places. So, the idea to keep the environment clean it would help to extend the quantity of visitors.

furthermore, we have significant reasons for that but i am going to commence the most important reason to keep the surroundings clean is that if we have clean places to visit we can enjoy them without worrying about the hygine and can make good memories there. A common case from my daily life, when I visited a tourist spot and I found contaminated water and trash bags there. It created a negative perspective in my eyes for that place. As a result, I asked almost everyone to not visit that place. So I think by following the rules and regulations we can make our environment neat and clean and also friendly for everyone. It can also gain attention of tourists and make them feel comfortable even away from home.

To conclude, I reiterate that there are plenty of important reasons to keep everything neat and clean so everyone can enjoy new spots and overall it can be benefical for government also.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing whether the rise of eco-tourism is a positive trend, focusing mainly on cleanliness and the enjoyment of natural spots. A position is presented, stating that the trend creates good effects by keeping environments neat. However, the ideas are somewhat repetitive and rely heavily on personal anecdotes rather than broader socio-economic arguments regarding eco-tourism. While the prompt asks about eco-tourism specifically, the student often drifts into general cleanliness of tourist spots. Ideas are developed, but the lack of depth in discussing the actual concept of eco-tourism places this at a Band 5.0 level.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is hindered by very long, run-on sentences and confusing referencing. For example, the second paragraph consists of a single massive sentence containing multiple ideas linked by repetitive conjunctions like 'because' and 'and'. Cohesive devices are sometimes inaccurate or over-used ('furthermore', 'besides this', 'To conclude, I reiterate'). Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion within the second and third paragraphs is weak, creating a somewhat disjointed reading experience. This aligns with Band 5.0 descriptors.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary range is limited and contains frequent spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'concurrent world' instead of 'contemporary world', 'd' in 'neat andd', 'echo system' for 'ecosystem', 'qdquate' for 'adequate', 'frustated', 'passangers', 'arond', 'hygine', and 'benefical'. While the student attempts some less common phrases like 'top notch concrete proof' and 'negative perspective', these often show awkward collocation or inappropriate style. These noticeable lexical errors impede communication in places, reflecting a Band 5.0 level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control is weak. Sentences are frequently over-extended and grammatically flawed, such as 'if we are travelling to somewhere and we find the paths neat and clean so it can affect all our mood'. Punctuation is also problematic, with run-on sentences lacking appropriate terminal punctuation. Grammatical errors are frequent throughout the text, including tense inconsistencies and faulty subject-verb agreement ('whenever in our family or relative try'), which can cause difficulty for the reader. This is a clear Band 5.0 performance.

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