Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Concern for the environment is growing rapidly and more and more people are choosing to be 'eco-tourists' - travelling in responsible, environmentally-friendly ways. As a result, the eco-tourism industry is expanding.

To what extent do you think this is a positive trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In this modern era, everyone has depended on technology and people believe that technology can reduce our pressure wich is correct.Individuals handover their work to the chatgpt,AI,Google etc and these tools complete the work of every person.For example: every student solve their problems through AI and complete their assignment through that as well.Moreover, every business man is giving the task to gemini like to email to the customers,chat with the purchasers etc.Due to that thing everyone is free and people want to move outside for relaxation,calmness.

Individuals make a plan with their friends and family to go to the northern areas of their country such as Naran in Pakistan.

Furthermore, when we start our tour then firstly we arrange a bike,car and bus like these types of vehicles which consume petrol and diesel.Due to these energies tourists has to spend sum of their money for the arrangment of petrol and diesel.But the technology has advanced a lot and engineers has been making an electro-transpot vehicels since last five years.These electro-vehicles are less cheaper than those which we are using now adays now.Everyone is adapting this trend and purchasing the electric car etc and they use them whenever they have to start a new tour.

For that purpose, the electro-toursim industry is expamding and lot of persons has started this business in their hometown.For example, Latif vehicles in Faisalabad is very pupolar and their quality and price is also excellent.This brand started their business just one year ago and they have earned hundred of millions righnoe in no time.

Secondaly,Bin salman electro in Dubai is also very famous in UAE.This company also started their business just half year ago and they also have saved around one hundred and fifty thoudand dollars with their businees whcih is a huge amount.

In my opinion,it is genuinely a positive trend in this era and i am also thinking about thsi businees and my parents are also stand with me and they agree to give me a enormus amount of money for staring the E-vehicles store in my area because it is a very outstanding way to generate a high profit in no time.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a clear view at the end: eco-tourism is “genuinely a positive trend,” and you attempt to support it with examples of electric vehicles and businesses. However, the response only minimally addresses the question because much of it shifts to technology reducing work pressure and to the profitability of vehicle shops. The link between these points and responsible, environmentally friendly travel is not explained. For example, you mention that electric vehicles use less fuel, but do not discuss their environmental benefits or other possible effects of eco-tourism. Develop a few directly relevant reasons, explain how they support your position, and use examples that demonstrate environmental responsibility rather than mainly business success.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has a basic sequence, moving from technology and travel to vehicles, businesses, and your opinion. Paragraph breaks and connectors such as “Furthermore” and “For that purpose” show an attempt to organise the ideas. However, the overall progression is difficult to follow because the opening discussion of AI and reduced pressure is not clearly connected to eco-tourism, and the two business examples interrupt rather than develop the argument. Some links are also unclear, such as “Due to that thing” and “For that purpose.” Group related points into focused paragraphs and make each paragraph’s connection to the question explicit. Use fewer formulaic transitions and clarify what “these energies” and “this trend” refer to.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “environmentally-friendly,” “petrol and diesel,” “electric vehicles,” and “industry,” which helps communicate the general subject. However, the range is often basic or repetitive, and inaccurate word choice and spelling sometimes strain the reader’s understanding. Examples include “electro-toursim,” “electro-transpot vehicels,” “pupolar,” and “thoudand.” Several expressions are also unnatural, such as “less cheaper” and “generate a high profit in no time.” Aim for accurate collocations and a more precise environmental vocabulary, such as emissions, sustainable transport, and conservation. Proofread spelling and choose words that describe the environmental impact, not only the commercial success of the businesses.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, and the main point is usually understandable. However, errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries occur frequently. For example, “every student solve” should use a singular verb, while “tourists has to spend” needs plural agreement. In “engineers has been making,” the subject and verb do not agree, and “my parents are also stand with me” has an incorrect verb construction. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with many sentences joined directly after full stops or commas. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses and check subject–verb agreement, verb forms, and sentence boundaries.

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