Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Concern for the environment is growing rapidly and more and more people are choosing to be 'eco-tourists' - travelling in responsible, environmentally-friendly ways. As a result, the eco-tourism industry is expanding.

To what extent do you think this is a positive trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Mostly people are bored in there life so all of that what a peac and like to do a unique activate who don't in there normal life so motly pepople to select a eco tourism because its more relef to for health.acourding to my point of view eco tourism is positive trand.

first thing is moslty people going to enjoiment,stress relif and some activite who not in there normal life but like a person enjoyment envrionment is growing repidly.i think you want to go mountains are,beach you go but yiu also little bit concern for enviroment like youb want to care a trash bag,don't throw a rubish in other area in that environment slow changes of damage.rather you want to go with you car then select a public tronsport its reduced a polution.its highly changes of envioment damage is cooking in a open location if u bring your food its ok,but you want to make a cooking in spesafic are its not good for environment.

mostly all of people eco tourism trip gone for weekend and for stress relif.eco-tourism is positive trend because its a unique activite to do and its not to do in ragular in there life,people's are select a eco location is mountains because in a mountains have a tracking and like more greeaner,a green forest area.

I prefare eco-tourism is positive trend because if i am happy or enjoy for doing this its batter for that but i also think to care a environment is more importent then my enjoyment.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear overall view in the opening and conclusion: eco-tourism is a positive trend, while environmental care should remain important. You also include relevant points about stress relief, enjoying natural places, using public transport and avoiding litter. However, the response only partially develops the task. Much of the discussion describes why people enjoy trips, rather than explaining the wider effects of the expanding eco-tourism industry. The environmental examples are useful but brief, and the point about cooking outdoors is difficult to follow. To strengthen the response, explain how responsible tourism benefits local communities or protects habitats, and support each main reason with a specific example. Keep your position clear while developing both the personal and environmental benefits.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic overall shape: an introduction, two body paragraphs and a concluding opinion. The ideas about enjoyment and environmental responsibility are relevant, and the final sentence returns to your main view. However, the progression between points is difficult to follow. For example, the first body paragraph moves from stress relief to mountains and beaches, then to rubbish, transport and cooking without clear links. Repeated use of “mostly” and “because” also makes the connections feel mechanical, while references such as “that environment” are not always clear. Organise each paragraph around one main idea, use topic sentences, and explain how each example supports that idea. Clearer sentence boundaries and more precise linking would make the argument easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “eco-tourism,” “public transport,” “pollution,” “environment” and “stress relief.” These choices show that you can communicate the general subject and some practical actions. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, while frequent spelling errors and inaccurate word choices sometimes make the meaning hard to understand. Examples include “unique activite,” “green forest area” and “slow changes of damage.” Aim to learn accurate topic collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise expressions for environmental impact, conservation and responsible travel would help you explain your ideas clearly without relying on repeated general words such as “good” or “enjoyment.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You make attempts to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example with “because” and “if,” and you use some simple sentence forms to state your opinion. However, sentence structures are limited, and errors in sentence formation, verb forms, agreement, articles and punctuation occur frequently enough to make parts difficult to understand. The opening sentence, “Mostly people are bored in there life,” is unclear, and the conditional example beginning “if you want to go mountains” does not form a controlled sentence. Several ideas run together without full stops, which further obscures their relationships. Practise writing one complete idea per sentence, then build accuracy with basic clauses before adding subordinate clauses. Check subject–verb agreement, articles and sentence boundaries during revision.

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