Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Concern for the environment is growing rapidly and more and more people are choosing to be 'eco-tourists' - travelling in responsible, environmentally-friendly ways. As a result, the eco-tourism industry is expanding.

To what extent do you think this is a positive trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Due to huge increase in environment pollution most of the individuals are travelling in eco friendly environment and wants to save the environment from the pollution in which result eco-friendly tourism is increasing. I think this is very good initiative to save our environment from pollution.

One of the advantage of this trend is to keep safe our environment from pollution by guiding tourists to keep clean the place where they are visiting. It is the responsibility of tourist to inspire peoples that they should keep clean the place. Tourists should guide individuals on social media platforms like Facebook, Instagram, TikTok and also by awareness campaign. Travelers also enhance the courage of local tourists to keep safe our environment from pollution. It is the responsibility of every local or international tourist that they should use disposable bags and use it again and again instead of using plastic or pollution causing things.

The other benefit of this trend is to boost our country tourism. Every country has its own beautiful places which is only one in the world. If we keep safe our country and tourist places then international tourist as well as local tourist also came to our country to visit out country's beautiful places. When number of international tourists expands per annum it also boost our economy. There are many counties in the world which rely only on their tourism like Dubai, Bali and many more.

So, every tourist and person of its country try to keep safe its country and expand courage of eco-friendly tourism.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You take a clear positive position, stating that eco-tourism is a “very good initiative,” and give two relevant reasons: protecting the environment and supporting tourism and the economy. These points address the question, but the discussion remains general and only partly explains how responsible travel achieves the claimed benefits. For example, the advice about keeping places clean and using bags is not clearly connected to specific eco-tourism practices, and the economic point would be stronger with a developed example showing how tourism benefits local communities. The conclusion repeats the call to support eco-tourism rather than weighing its effects. To strengthen the response, explain each reason in more detail and make the link between environmentally responsible travel and its positive outcomes explicit.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting separate benefits, and a concluding sentence. The sequence from environmental protection to economic benefits is understandable, and phrases such as “One of the advantage” and “The other benefit” signal the paragraph topics. However, progression within paragraphs is often repetitive: the first body paragraph repeatedly returns to keeping the environment clean without developing distinct supporting points. Some links are unclear, particularly the move from tourists using social media to the claim about inspiring local tourists. The conclusion also largely repeats earlier ideas. Organise each paragraph around one clearly explained reason, use references that make relationships between ideas explicit, and vary linking language rather than relying on repeated formulations.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the main ideas, with relevant terms such as “eco-friendly tourism,” “environment pollution,” “international tourists,” and “boost our economy.” However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, especially “keep safe,” “pollution,” and “tourist.” Some choices are inaccurate or unnatural, including “enhance the courage of local tourists” and “expand courage,” which make the intended meaning less clear. There are also word-form and collocation problems, such as “environment pollution” and “beautiful places which is only one in the world.” Aim for more precise expressions, for example, “protect natural areas,” “encourage local residents,” and “unique destinations.” This would make your argument clearer and less repetitive.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including conditional structures such as “If we keep safe our country … then international tourist … came to our country.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence construction sometimes make the reader work to understand the point. Examples include “most of the individuals … wants,” “One of the advantage,” and “it also boost our economy.” The conditional sentence also shifts awkwardly from “keep” to “came.” Practise checking subject–verb agreement and maintaining consistent verb forms, and build longer sentences from accurate clauses. For instance, “If we protect our natural attractions, more visitors may come” expresses the conditional idea more clearly.

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