Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Concern for the environment is growing rapidly and more and more people are choosing to be 'eco-tourists' - travelling in responsible, environmentally-friendly ways. As a result, the eco-tourism industry is expanding.

To what extent do you think this is a positive trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In my opinion this is 50% correct that trend that it is good approach to move to a environment friendly area for our own convenience and peace.More people are travelling to the areas outside beacause they are facing much more environment issues and due to a large population and growing environment.people always want to facilitate their own self in any possible way and that's why they are moving to different areas and hence environment is growing very fastly than normal rate and it is positive to some extent but it has also some drawbacks.

More and More places are being localized and it is creating a huge crowd and some quite peaceful places are being accomodated with much more people who are moving to environment friendly areas for their own ease. althugh it's good but people should also maintain the peace and beauty of environment also try to keep the environment clean.

in this regard i want to highlight an example of an area which is less deveoped and will compare it with a developed area.

Let see an area which is fully developed and have all facilites and is a moderanized area having all the facilities from markets to industries it is fully developed on the other hand there is an area which is less developed and have less facilities.Now according to different thinking approach of people some will move to developed area from less developed area for their facilities and it will get more crowded and busy and get also polluted and some will move to less developed area to avoid the hustle and bustle of busy area to maintain their peace of mind. so that's totally a thinking approach and it's good trend of growing environment

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You do express a qualified view, saying the trend is “positive to some extent” but also has drawbacks, and you mention crowding and pollution as possible consequences. However, the response only partially addresses the question because it does not clearly explain the environmental or social benefits of eco-tourism, and the discussion shifts to people moving between developed and less-developed areas. The comparison does not establish how responsible tourism affects destinations, so the example is not sufficiently relevant or developed. Your position is also difficult to follow: “50% correct” is unclear, and the final claim that it is a “good trend” does not resolve the earlier reservations. State your extent clearly, then support it with specific, directly relevant reasons and examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the response into paragraphs, and phrases such as “on the other hand” and “in this regard” signal relationships between ideas. However, the overall progression is difficult to follow: the opening introduces environmental travel, the next paragraph discusses crowding, and the example then turns to general migration between developed and less-developed areas. These ideas are not linked clearly enough to build a sustained argument about eco-tourism. Some connections are also repetitive or unclear, particularly the repeated references to people moving to different areas. Use each paragraph for one clear point, connect the example directly to that point, and make the conclusion follow logically from the reasons presented.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “environment friendly,” “polluted,” “crowded,” and “peaceful,” which helps communicate the general subject. However, the range is limited and several expressions are imprecise or unnatural, such as “50% correct,” “facilitate their own self,” and “growing environment.” Repetition of “area,” “people,” and “facilities” also limits precision. Spelling errors such as “beacause,” “accomodated,” and “deveoped” are noticeable and reduce the accuracy of the vocabulary. Aim for more specific terms connected to the task, such as conservation, local communities, wildlife habitats, and visitor pressure, and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to combine ideas in longer sentences, for example with “because,” “and hence,” and “on the other hand,” showing some effort to use more than simple sentence patterns. However, these longer structures are often faulty, and sentence boundaries and punctuation are frequently unclear. Examples include “More people are travelling to the areas outside beacause they are facing…” and “an area which is fully developed and have all facilites,” where agreement and sentence construction need attention. Articles and verb forms are also inconsistent, as in “a environment friendly area” and “some will move… and it will get more crowded.” Use shorter, controlled sentences first, then add complex clauses with accurate agreement, articles, and punctuation.

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