Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Concern for the environment is growing rapidly and more and more people are choosing to be 'eco-tourists' - travelling in responsible, environmentally-friendly ways. As a result, the eco-tourism industry is expanding.

To what extent do you think this is a positive trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

yes,it is becomes a big problem every one want to visit a new place.some peoples make their dream true in short term and some trying hard to travel every corner of world

today most of people want to become a ecoturist.This is one of best passion which people choose and the requirment for this you just need a knowledge about specific historical places like old buldings,forts,musem if anyone have know about it can start this job and its becoming popular and also good money in itbut before start this you want to know side effect of this job

first of all tourism is a massive responsiblity every people can not able to get such responsibiltes. i also remember a short story which happen with us me and my friend visit a badshahi mosque in last year we also hire a eco-tourist for gets knowledge about mosque .He take us on roof of masjid when we reach there in next 5 minutes our tourist men dissapear in crowded area it is very sad movement for us but at the end we finally came out from it

overall tourism are expended quickly peoples also want to travell such area there people are friendly they give respect him and coprative and told the whole story about visiting sight

in conclusion, eco turism is expending in upcoming time everyone loves with it and in my opinion it is great trend that peoples made and many positive effects of this over all it is great passion

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a clear overall opinion in the conclusion, calling eco-tourism “a great trend,” and you attempt to support your view with a personal visit to Badshahi Mosque. However, the response only minimally addresses whether the industry’s expansion is positive: most of the discussion shifts to becoming a tourist guide, the knowledge required, and an incident where a guide disappeared. The story does not explain the environmental benefits or harms of responsible travel, and the claim that it brings “good money” is not developed. To strengthen the response, directly discuss relevant effects—such as protecting natural sites, supporting local communities, or risks from increased visitor numbers—and explain how these support your position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic overall shape: an introduction, a paragraph beginning “first of all,” and a concluding opinion. The personal story also provides one identifiable example. However, ideas are not arranged in a clear progression, and the response moves abruptly from travel aspirations to guide qualifications, a disappointing mosque visit, and general claims about friendly people. Linking expressions such as “overall” and “in conclusion” signal stages but do not clarify how the ideas connect; “overall” also appears before the conclusion. Several sentences run together, making relationships difficult to follow. Organise the essay around two or three reasons why eco-tourism is positive, use a separate paragraph for each, and connect each example explicitly to the argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt some topic-related vocabulary, including “eco-tourist,” “historical places,” “responsibility,” and “positive effects,” and the mosque example gives the response some specific language. However, the range is basic and often repetitive, with “people,” “tourism,” and “great” used broadly rather than precisely. Several spelling and word-choice errors make parts difficult to understand, including “ecoturist,” “requirment,” “buldings,” and “expended.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “made their dream true” and “good money in it.” Build a more precise vocabulary for the topic and check spelling and collocations; for example, describe tourism as “expanding” and explain its “economic benefits” or “environmental impact.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple statements and longer sentences, and the reader can identify the main opinion. However, grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes obscure meaning. Examples include “it is becomes,” “some peoples make,” “if anyone have know,” and “tourism are expended,” which show problems with verb forms, agreement, and sentence construction. Articles and sentence boundaries are also often missing or inconsistent, as in “we also hire a eco-tourist for gets knowledge about mosque.” Most sentences need careful editing, and punctuation does not reliably separate complete ideas. Practise accurate simple sentence patterns first, then combine them with controlled clauses using “because,” “although,” or “which.”

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