Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Concern for the environment is growing rapidly and more and more people are choosing to be 'eco-tourists' - travelling in responsible, environmentally-friendly ways. As a result, the eco-tourism industry is expanding.

To what extent do you think this is a positive trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Globalization of eco-tourism is rapidly increasing, the people or the friendly environmental tourist is travelling to other country to experience the other culture or environment. Concerning about the problem is dramatically growing of tourist around the world.

In the Philippines we have a lot of tourist every year and we have a lot of eco-friendly site to visit, so people who visit Philippines are always have a good memories for them because you cannot experience the vibes here compared to other country. The positive effect of this is the country will get more income, for the filipino people who are experiencing financial, government will help those people who are need for financial assistance that are tax in the people who visited of our eco-tourism.

In addition, people who are not have fun in the tourism of the Philippines are those have a problem with the government, the native people are always have a problem with the leadership because some of them is corrupting the funds for the filipino people. Furthermore, government are always excusing about the problem of the leadership, so the tourism is a big impact for that because native people are not dependable to the government.

In conclusion, the positivity of these trend is big impact for the fund of a country who have a lot of visitors, if the government have a heart that are not willing to corrupt the fund or the income, the country will gain a positive to native people who are staying there.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a broadly positive view, mainly arguing that eco-tourism can bring income to the Philippines and benefit local people. The country-specific example is relevant, and your conclusion returns to the potential financial benefit. However, the response only partially addresses whether the trend is positive: most of the discussion concerns tourism income and government corruption, with little explanation of how environmentally responsible travel protects nature or what disadvantages it may bring. The opening is also difficult to interpret, so your position is not consistently clear. To strengthen the response, state your degree of support directly, then develop two relevant reasons with clear explanations and specific examples connected to eco-tourism rather than tourism in general.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. Paragraphs broadly separate the claimed economic benefit from concerns about government leadership, and connectors such as “In addition,” “Furthermore” and “In conclusion” help signal stages of the response. However, the overall progression is not always clear: the second body paragraph shifts from tourists’ experiences to corruption and native people without explaining the links between these points. Some sentences also combine several ideas, making relationships difficult to follow. Use topic sentences that state each paragraph’s main point, and connect supporting details explicitly to that point. Clearer referencing and fewer formulaic transitions would make the argument easier to track.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “eco-tourism,” “environmentally-friendly,” “financial assistance,” “corrupting the funds” and “leadership.” This gives you a basic range for discussing tourism and its possible economic effects. However, several expressions are inaccurate or awkward, and repeated general terms such as “problem,” “people,” “fund” and “positive” limit precision. Phrases such as “the positivity of these trend” and “a positive to native people” make your meaning less natural and sometimes unclear. Build a more precise set of topic-related expressions, and check collocations and word forms when revising. For example, distinguish income for local communities from government revenue, and describe environmental benefits directly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt some longer sentences and use clauses to explain causes and consequences, for example, “if the government have a heart…” However, the range of structures is limited, and errors in basic sentence patterns frequently make the message difficult to follow. Examples include “people who visit Philippines are always have,” “the native people are always have a problem,” and “government are always excusing.” These show problems with verb forms, agreement and sentence construction. Articles and plurals also need attention, as in “other country” and “these trend.” Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses using “because,” “although” and “if.” Proofread each sentence for a clear subject and correctly formed verb.

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