Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows a town square and surrounding area in 2014 and the plans for development of the area to be completed by 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The two diagrams compare the proportation of town square and surrounding area in 2014 and the plans for development of the area to be completed by 2020.

Overall, the most significant changes were occur in 2020,many new developments were established in this year.

In 2014 to 2020 town hall and fountain was maintain same proportation.

In 2020 new buildings were built like , childrens playground for playing area covered seating into two section for people seating, also built gradens for plants bed like tress and different seeds, also new supermarket development for people used for their needs, also open local artists gallery for people explore new historical paintings,also bulit new shops to buy anything.

But in 2014 only few plans for development used, buildings of library and history museum was very good

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the two years and mention several genuine changes, including the playground, covered seating, supermarket, gallery and shops. However, the response is substantially under the required length: it contains 112 words, 38 short of the 150-word minimum, so there is not enough detail to summarise the main features adequately. The overview is vague (“many new developments”) and does not clearly compare what stayed the same with what changed. Some details are inaccurate or unsupported: the town hall and fountain remained in the same locations, not the same “proportation,” and the plant beds are not described as containing trees or seeds. You also omit important changes such as the fish restaurant and bar becoming multiple bars and restaurants. Develop a precise overview and report the main changes by location.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, a brief overview, and paragraphs about the planned changes and the earlier square. This gives the reader some sense of the comparison. However, progression is weak because the final paragraph (“But in 2014…”) introduces a general comment rather than completing a clear, organised account of the map. The long third paragraph strings many features together with repeated “also,” making relationships between details difficult to follow. Some linking is attempted through “Overall,” “In 2020,” and “But,” but these devices do not consistently clarify contrasts or locations. Group the information by area or by what is retained, replaced, and added, and use clear sentence boundaries and references to guide the reader.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant map vocabulary, including “town square,” “surrounding area,” “supermarket,” “playground,” “covered seating,” and “local artists gallery.” These terms show an attempt to describe the plan, but the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, which sometimes makes the intended meaning unclear. For example, “proportation” is not appropriate for describing a map, “buildings … was very good” does not explain their status, and “people used for their needs” is vague. There are also spelling and word-form errors such as “childrens,” “gradens,” “tress,” and “bulit.” Use precise location and change vocabulary, such as “replaced,” “remained,” “to the east of,” and “along the southern edge,” and check spelling.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response communicates a few basic ideas, but grammatical control is inconsistent and the sentence structures are very limited. Errors occur in verb forms and agreement, as in “changes were occur” and “town hall and fountain was maintain,” and in articles and sentence construction, as in “built gradens for plants bed.” The long sentence beginning “In 2020 new buildings were built like” contains several clauses joined mainly by commas and repeated “also,” so the relationships between ideas are unclear. Punctuation is also unreliable, with missing spaces after commas and a comma before “like.” Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine related details using controlled clauses—for example, state what remained and what was replaced in separate sentences.

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