Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows a town square and surrounding area in 2014 and the plans for development of the area to be completed by 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The diagram represents information about the construction to make a square town according to surrendering aera in 2014and now it was completed by the developer in 2020. According to the first diagram we can see that the square was very simple accoding to the 2nd diagram .in 2014 the construction of the engineer was thinking simply to draw the construction structure .but we live in the revolutionary industriation .so we can easily build up however by using Internet. Further information form the second daigram we can scan that by using Internet they built this structure more critical and hardly according to the 1st diagarom among them they are depicted construction structure was very nicely and properly in addiction to using internet hardly and perfectly they designed this structure more better than 1st diagram. In the conclusion we can agree that Internet was kept a significant role to draw this diagram perfectly and astonishingly

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0

The response fails to address the task requirements. Instead of describing the physical changes in the town square (such as the addition of trees, seating, or road modifications), the text focuses on irrelevant commentary about 'the Internet' and 'revolutionary industriation'. The student does not report the main features or make comparisons between the 2014 and 2020 plans. The content is largely off-topic, as it describes the process of designing the diagram rather than the content of the diagram itself. Consequently, the response does not provide an accurate summary of the visual information provided.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks logical organization and progression. While there are paragraph breaks, the ideas within them are disconnected and repetitive. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and often inappropriate, such as the misuse of 'in addiction to' and 'further information form'. The lack of clear referencing makes it difficult for the reader to follow the writer's intent. The transition between ideas is disjointed, and the overall structure does not facilitate a clear summary of the visual data.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is limited and frequently misused. There are numerous spelling errors (e.g., 'surrendering' for surrounding, 'aera' for area, 'daigram' for diagram, 'industriation' for industrialization). The word choices are often inappropriate for an academic report, such as 'hardly' used to mean 'with difficulty' or 'intricately', and 'more better', which is grammatically incorrect. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey precise information about the changes in the town square, relying instead on repetitive and vague language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There is a lack of control over basic sentence structures, with many run-on sentences and fragments. Subject-verb agreement is inconsistent, and there are significant issues with word order and punctuation. Complex structures are attempted but are consistently inaccurate, such as 'the construction of the engineer was thinking simply'. The high frequency of errors throughout the text makes it difficult to read and obscures the intended meaning.

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