Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows a town square and surrounding area in 2014 and the plans for development of the area to be completed by 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

This picture illustrate the development of an town square after almost an decade, this picture gives the data about what are the things that have been changed.

before the develpment there was the bars and the resturants at the starting of the town and administrating builiding just on the right side of that, and then in the west just beside the administrative builiding there was a town hall and just below it there was a bandstand and in the middle there was a fountain,

and on the left side of the town, and foutain there is library and a history musuem with a fish market in the top left cornor

after the development, the bars and resturant remains the same on the same spot there are some new covered seating just after the resturant the fountain remain same in the center and a children play area at the right side of the fountain, and on the far right side the shops are moved in the place of administrative office, and in the west there are some plant bed just after the fountain, and then there is the super market on the west left sided and town hall on the ride side of the town

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to summarise the main features of the town square maps for 2014 and the 2020 development plan. However, the task achievement is significantly hindered by a lack of an overview paragraph and inadequate comparison. Many details are imprecise, confused, or hard to follow, such as describing the shops moving in the place of the administrative office incorrectly. While the student identifies several changes like the introduction of a children's play area and covered seating, the information is presented as a list of disjointed details rather than a structured summary. According to the descriptors, this falls into Band 5 because the response is limited and under-developed, missing key structural requirements of an Academic Task 1 report.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response suffers from severe issues with organisation and cohesion. The entire text consists of only two extremely long, run-on sentences separated mostly by commas rather than full stops or logical paragraph breaks. There is no clear overall progression; the student jumps erratically from one part of the map to another, using repetitive and basic linking words like 'and', 'and then', and 'just below it'. Paragraphing is completely neglected, as there is no division between the introduction, the description of the 2014 map, and the 2020 plan. This matches the Band 4 descriptor, where information and ideas are not arranged coherently and cohesive devices are faulty or repetitive.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used throughout the essay is basic, repetitive, and restricted. Words like 'picture', 'things', 'bars', and 'resturants' (spelling error) appear frequently, while attempts at less common vocabulary are either missing or inaccurate. There are several spelling and word-form errors, including 'develpment', 'resturants', 'administrating', 'cornor', and 'foutain'. The student also struggles with precise locational terminology, repeatedly relying on vague phrases like 'on the left side', 'in the west', and 'on the ride side'. This demonstrates a limited range of vocabulary appropriate for an academic report, fitting the Band 4 level where basic vocabulary and frequent errors strain the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. The text is characterised by massive run-on sentences linked excessively with coordinating conjunctions like 'and', showing a complete lack of control over punctuation and sentence boundaries. There are numerous basic grammatical errors, including missing articles ('an town square', 'the bars and the resturants'), incorrect prepositions, and subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'the bars and resturant remains'). Complex structures are virtually absent, and the heavy reliance on simple, conjoined clauses results in low accuracy. These frequent errors and lack of structural variety place the response firmly at Band 4.

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