Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows a town square and surrounding area in 2014 and the plans for development of the area to be completed by 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The diagram below illustrates the town square and surrounding area in 2014 and plan for development of the area to be completed by 2020.In this eassy we are going to disscuss the main features and the information related to the updated areas.
In 2014 the town square area is not well developed ,they had few places for the public to visit. For example there's a fountain in the middle of the town and very next to that fountain thers is a bandstand however town hall and fish market are oppisite to each other on north side of the town square, sameas restaurant and bar is on the south however history museum and library right next to each other on west side of the town.
In start of 2020 town square much more developed now their's alot of facilities are avaliable for the public now. For instant near to the fountain there is children's playground thers are covered seats are avaliable for the comunity plant beds and supermarket is also there for your services and and for shopping capule of shope are also avaliable.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to summarise the main features of the maps, noting key changes such as the introduction of the supermarket, playground, and shops. However, the response falls short in terms of academic register and precise data selection. The introductory paragraph includes conversational filler ("In this eassy we are going to disscuss...") which is inappropriate for an Academic Task 1 response. Furthermore, some spatial descriptions are vague or inaccurate, and the overview lacks a clear summary of the overall spatial transformation. It addresses the prompt broadly but lacks the formal, objective tone and comprehensive coverage expected at higher bands, aligning best with a Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into three paragraphs (introduction and two body paragraphs covering 2014 and 2020 respectively). However, the progression of ideas is hindered by a lack of standard cohesive devices and poor punctuation. Sentences run together without proper punctuation or conjunctions (e.g., "...history museum and library right next to each other on west side of the town."). Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the overall organization feels mechanical rather than naturally flowing. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is weak, justifying a Band 4.5 or 5.0. Band 5.0 is awarded as there is a basic logical arrangement between the two time periods.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The lexical range is quite limited and repetitive, relying on basic descriptive words ("well developed", "places", "facilities"). There are also frequent spelling errors throughout the text, including "eassy", "disscuss", "thers", "oppisite", "sameas", "comunity", "avalialiable" (variations of available), and "capule of shope". These lexical errors and limitations occasionally strain the reader and reflect a weak control of word formation and spelling, fitting the Band 4.0 descriptor.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The text demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting mostly of simple or poorly connected clauses. There are frequent, heavy grammatical errors, including missing articles ("there's a fountain", "town hall and fish market are oppisite"), missing verbs of being, tense inconsistencies, and run-on sentences. Complex structures are rare and consistently faulty when attempted. Because errors are frequent and often distort basic sentence boundaries, the response aligns with Band 4.0.
See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.
Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.