Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows a town square and surrounding area in 2014 and the plans for development of the area to be completed by 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The town has becom more devlopment and new improvment since 2020 , the add new places and existing or expanded other facilities such as libery or bear .

as we observed on the west side the fish shope have move and replaisate by suparmarket also on the left side they change the museum by a gallery and on thev medale they add new thing like plante and children play ground for have a good veiw overowl, n the south they remove the libery and they expanded the bar and fish restaurant.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify several relevant changes, including the fish market being replaced by a supermarket, the museum becoming a gallery, and new planting and play facilities. However, the response gives only a minimal account of the plans and does not provide a clear overview of the main changes. Some details are inaccurate or unclear: the library is not removed in the plan, and the new playground is east of the fountain rather than simply “in the middle.” The town hall and central fountain remain, while shops and covered seating are also important changes that are omitted. The response is also 59 words below the required minimum, which leaves too little space to select and report the main features fully. Describe the overall transformation and compare the key locations more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the description by location, using phrases such as “on the west side” and “in the south.” This gives the reader some sense of how the changes relate to the map. However, nearly all the information is compressed into one long, loosely connected passage, so the sequence is difficult to follow. The opening does not establish a clear overview, and the shift from western changes to central features and then southern buildings is not signposted consistently. Linking phrases such as “In the north-west,” “Meanwhile,” and “By contrast” could guide the reader through the map. Use separate paragraphs for an overview and for grouped details, and make each sentence focus on a clear area or change.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt some task-relevant vocabulary, including “west side,” “gallery,” “children play ground,” and “expanded,” and the reader can recognise several intended changes. However, the range is basic and some word choices or spellings make the meaning difficult to recover, for example “bear,” “fish shope,” “replaisate,” and “good veiw overowl.” Some expressions are also imprecise: “new thing” does not identify the facilities, and “the fish shope have move” does not clearly describe replacement. Use accurate map vocabulary such as “replaced by,” “remained,” “converted into,” and “covered seating,” and check spelling. More precise nouns and verbs would make the comparisons clearer and less repetitive.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to connect several ideas in longer sentences, for example by using “also” and “and,” but sentence control is weak and the range of structures is very limited. Errors in verb forms and tense appear in phrases such as “the add new places” and “the fish shope have move.” Articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries are also problematic, as in “the change the museum by a gallery” and the long final sequence joined with commas and conjunctions. These errors frequently make relationships between changes unclear. Practise writing short, complete sentences in the past and future/passive forms—for example, “The fish market was replaced by a supermarket”—then combine related details with accurate punctuation.

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