Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Concern for the environment is growing and more and more people are choosing to recycle. But some people suggest that recycling is not enough. They believe we need to consume less.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Due to increasing concern for the environment, more and more individuals are choosing the option of recycling. Some of these views suggest that recycling is not sufficient, but rather consume less, In as much as both views are important there is always the prons and cons of both which I will be discussing in this eassy.

There has been an increasing the climate change which is affecting the environment, one the issue is air pollusion which is caused as a result of high industralisation, waste product from cars which realeases harmful gas into the atmosphere,and also our water These gases then causes damage to the ozone layer. For example, in lagos majority of people own and driver cas to work, which the realease of this harmful gas into the atmosphere, thereby contributing to the damaged been experienced.

Other view feels the best way is to consume less of this things that causes this the release of harmful gases into the atmosphere, they belive if we have less peole driving to work and use public transport system to reduce the number of car at a given period of time, and the instroduction of the use of electric cars which will reduce drastically the amount of harmful gases been release and give a healthy environment. For instance more companies can provide transport for their employess, so they are able to commute to and fro the office, which will lead to less driving inturn lesser harm to the environment.

In conclusion, the growing concern of for the environment is causing more and more people to choosing recycle by reduction of the use of car which can cause harm to the artmospher and encourage the use of public transport systems and electrical cars.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify both recycling and consuming less as relevant responses, and your examples about commuting, public transport and electric cars are connected to environmental protection. However, the discussion does not adequately explain the benefits or limitations of recycling, so one view is largely left undeveloped. The essay also does not state a clear personal opinion: the introduction says both views have “prons and cons,” while the conclusion mainly repeats ideas about reducing car use without saying which approach you support or how the two should be balanced. To strengthen the response, explain each view directly, support the points with relevant reasoning, and make your own position explicit and consistent from the introduction to the conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and the paragraphs broadly move from environmental problems to reducing consumption. Examples such as company transport help give the second body paragraph a focus. However, the progression is difficult to follow in places: the first body paragraph describes pollution rather than explaining recycling, and the link between that paragraph and the next is not clearly signposted. Some connections are awkward or unclear, including “Other view feels” and “In conclusion” followed by a sentence that combines several ideas without a clear relationship. Use topic sentences that identify the view being discussed, organise each paragraph around one main point, and use clear references and transitions to show how the ideas connect.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “climate change,” “harmful gas,” “public transport system” and “electric cars,” which helps communicate the environmental subject. There are also attempts at more specific language, such as “industralisation” and “commute.” However, spelling errors and imprecise or repetitive phrasing are noticeable, for example “air pollusion,” “realeases,” “damaged been experienced” and repeated references to “harmful gases.” Some expressions are difficult to interpret, such as “consume less of this things that causes this the release.” Build accuracy with common environmental collocations and check spelling and word forms carefully. More precise vocabulary would make the argument clearer without relying on repeated general phrases.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a cause-and-effect construction beginning “For example, in lagos…” and a sentence explaining how company transport could reduce driving. However, complex sentences are often difficult to control, and errors in agreement, verb forms, articles and sentence boundaries recur. For example, “These gases then causes” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “more and more people to choosing recycle” has an incorrect verb pattern. The opening also joins several clauses with commas, making the sentence hard to follow. Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a clearly connected supporting clause, then check agreement and verb forms. More reliable punctuation would also help readers follow your ideas.

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