Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Concern for the environment is growing and more and more people are choosing to recycle. But some people suggest that recycling is not enough. They believe we need to consume less.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
due to enviromental growth, noumerous people are choosing recycle however some people that recycling is not enough. they beleive we need to consume less. In my oppinion, recycling is not enough for environment growth we should prefer to consume less.
Concern for the environment is growing and more and more people are choosing to recycle. they beleive that it is not significant to consume less because it reduce our economy and it also effoct our government fundings. Furthermore, it cuase finincial cricies and disability in economy. For example,if government importing matirial for other countries and we donot peshase it. it may cuase of lose in government funding.
On the other hand, some people suggest that recycling is not enough. They believe "we need to consume less" think that if we consume less they environmental condition become good and they also dont need to parchase more thing which may be the sorce of their finantial stability. On the other hand if they consume less the enviroment rish decrease and when it decrease it may support to decrease the diseases. For example, if we donot parchase wooden instrument the cuting of forests decrease and if they forest cuting decrease it may support our environment to became clean.
In conclusion, if we need to clean our environment so first we shoulad want to spread awerness to all the people and then we need to decrease our consuming. if we consume less from the biggening it my cause of finantial crises and it effect our economy very well.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to address all parts of the task by discussing both the view that recycling is not enough and the need to consume less, while also stating a personal opinion. However, the ideas are underdeveloped and the arguments are difficult to follow due to severe language expression issues. For example, the student writes, 'if government importing matirial for other countries and we donot peshase it. it may cuase of lose in government funding.' The position is stated at the beginning and end, but the reasoning lacks clarity and supporting examples are confusing. Consequently, the task is addressed only partially, aligning with the criteria for Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The text is divided into paragraphs, which shows an attempt at structural organisation. However, there is no clear overall progression of ideas, and cohesive devices are used inadequately or inaccurately. The transitions between paragraphs are abrupt, such as using 'On the other hand' repeatedly to introduce both supporting and opposing ideas. Referencing is frequently unclear, as seen in pronouns like 'they' and 'it' where the antecedent is ambiguous (e.g., 'if they forest cuting decrease it may support our environment'). Paragraphing is also disrupted by broken sentences and repetition. These features place the response firmly at Band 4.0 for coherence and cohesion.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling and word-choice errors that strain the reader's understanding. Examples of severe spelling issues include 'enviromental', 'noumerous', 'beleive', 'oppinion', 'effoct', 'finincial', 'cricies', 'matirial', 'peshase', 'cuase', 'sorce', 'parchase', 'cuting', 'became', 'shoulad', 'awerness', 'biggening', and 'effect' (confused with 'affect'). The lexical range is limited and inadequate for discussing economic and environmental issues effectively, which corresponds to a Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The response shows a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex structures are almost entirely faulty, featuring severe errors in subject-verb agreement, tense consistency, and clause formation. Examples include 'if government importing matirial for other countries and we donot peshase it', 'if we consume less from the biggening it my cause of finincial crises and it effect our economy very well', and 'if they forest cuting decrease it may support our environment'. Punctuation is also misused throughout the text. These frequent errors cause significant difficulty for the reader, placing the score at Band 4.0.
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