Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-11
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Concern for the environment is growing and more and more people are choosing to recycle. But some people suggest that recycling is not enough. They believe we need to consume less.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
In every area recycle should be located for the pollution perspective. If we discuss about the pollution in different countries most of the asian countries would be count as a high amount. Growing population lead too much pollution so every human being should be aware of further nature disease.
There are always different types of human being that represent their thoughts in many ways. So that social discussion is needed eventually. Some people concern about the recycle progress which is very significant for environmental benefits. Talking about the progressive of population recycle is gone to be the perfect solution for each area and country. The amount of growing population can increase the pollution. So some people absolutely can concern about growing more recycle which can lead them to be a better social worker as a human being.
On the other hand, some people also concern about the more consuming rather than growing more recycle. From their perspective if people consume less,then the amount of recycle would be in limitation which is also a thoughtful decision. However recycle is permanent use for all around the world. Moreover there are nothing important than stabilize or maintain proper hygiene in all over the areas.
In conclusion, both side of view is relevant. However recycle should be more use in every areas specially in those countries that have larger population with low knowledge of hygiene process. It is significant to lead them the more use of recycle and show them the proper consuming methods and limitations.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
You recognise both positions: recycling is presented as beneficial, while consuming less is described as another way to reduce waste, and your conclusion favours expanding recycling. However, the discussion only minimally answers the question because the reasons remain vague and are not supported with relevant examples. For instance, “recycle is permanent use for all around the world” does not explain why recycling is preferable, and the claim that lower consumption limits recycling is not clearly connected to the opposing view. The opening focus on pollution and population also does not establish a clear argument. To strengthen the response, explain how recycling and reduced consumption each help the environment, then give a specific example and state your position consistently.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The response has a basic paragraph structure, with an introduction, separate discussion paragraphs and a conclusion, and it signals contrast with “On the other hand.” These features give the reader some sense of the intended organisation. However, ideas do not progress clearly within paragraphs: the second paragraph moves from social discussion to population growth and recycling without showing how the points connect. Linking phrases such as “Moreover” and “So” are sometimes used where the relationship between ideas is unclear, and “both side of view” does not clearly refer back to the two arguments. Organise each body paragraph around one view, develop its reasoning in sequence, and use clear references and transitions to show how each sentence supports the main point.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “pollution,” “environmental benefits,” “population,” and “hygiene,” so the general subject is recognisable. However, the range is basic and repetitive, particularly the repeated use of “recycle” and “concern,” and several inaccurate word choices or collocations make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “growing more recycle” and “progressive of population recycle” are not natural expressions, while “nature disease” does not clearly convey the intended environmental harm. Build a more precise set of topic phrases, such as “increase recycling rates,” “reduce household waste,” and “environmental damage.” Check that each word fits its intended meaning and grammatical form, rather than repeating a familiar term.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including the conditional structure “if people consume less” and the relative clause “which can lead them to be a better social worker.” This shows some willingness to vary sentence patterns, and the main topic can generally be followed. However, errors in sentence construction and grammatical forms are frequent enough to make several statements unclear. Examples include “Growing population lead,” “most of the asian countries would be count,” and “there are nothing important,” which show problems with agreement and verb forms. Articles, plurals and punctuation also need attention, as in “in every areas” and “less,then.” Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and complete clause patterns, and proofread sentence boundaries and spacing.
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