Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Concern for the environment is growing and more and more people are choosing to recycle. But some people suggest that recycling is not enough. They believe we need to consume less.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Recycling is not enough to overcome the pollution, in the contemporary commerical landscape, we need to reduce pollution to avoid the things such as overcome the use of plastic and pollitin. because they can cause to polluite our environment, which is effects directly human and spiceas. I firmly agree, the second argument, becaue recyclling is not solution to clean environment. this essay will discuss the things with relevant example.

The first and foremost reason behind this is that when the use of recycled material leave negative effects on human health. people store the food and drinks in plastic bags, which cause throat issues. The primary reason behind is that pollution is affecting biodiversity, and some speacies are becoming extinct, because people through rabish in the edges of the river and sea side.

Conversely, opponents claim that we need to wipe out the use of recycled material becaue our human, speases, environment even forest threatend from recycled material. Futhermore, we need to change the habits and use alternatives such as glass and steel. these are better than plastic. when we use these material we overcome the health issues.

From my perspective plastic create jerms easily which is harmfull for healt, in that time our youngster face allot of health issues and sckin issues which from gernms.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You state a clear preference for reducing consumption in the introduction (“I firmly agree”), and you mention relevant environmental concerns, including plastic use and harm to biodiversity. However, the task asks you to discuss both recycling and consuming less, and the two views are not explained in a balanced or sufficiently clear way. The paragraph beginning “The first and foremost reason” focuses on health and litter, but does not show how recycling helps or where its limits lie. The opposing view is also confusingly described as wiping out recycled material. Your own position is repeated but not supported with a developed example. The response is also 35 words below the required minimum, limiting the space available to address the task.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a concluding viewpoint. Connectors such as “Conversely” and “Furthermore” show an attempt to guide the reader through contrasting ideas. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow because the links between claims are unclear. For example, the point about storing food in plastic bags and throat issues does not clearly connect to the preceding claim about recycled materials. The final paragraph introduces health and skin problems without bringing the discussion to a clear conclusion. Some transitions also signal a contrast that is not fully explained. To improve, give each paragraph one main purpose, explain how each example supports it, and finish with a concise conclusion that restates your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “pollution,” “biodiversity,” “extinct,” “alternatives,” and “environment,” which helps identify the subject of the essay. There are also attempts to use more formal expressions, such as “From my perspective.” However, frequent spelling errors and inaccurate word choices make several points hard to understand: “commerical,” “pollitin,” “speacies,” and “jerms” are examples. Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, such as “overcome the use of plastic” and “wipe out the use of recycled material.” Build a more reliable set of environmental collocations and check spelling carefully. Prefer precise terms such as “reduce plastic consumption,” “recycling schemes,” and “harmful effects on health” over vague or incorrectly formed expressions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including a relative clause in “plastic bags, which cause throat issues” and a reason clause beginning “because.” This shows some effort to connect ideas rather than relying only on short statements. However, errors in sentence boundaries, agreement, articles, and verb forms are frequent enough to make parts difficult to interpret. For instance, “because they can cause to polluite our environment” is not a complete, well-formed clause, while “which is effects directly human” has an incorrect verb pattern. The opening also begins a new sentence with lowercase “because,” and several sentences run together without clear punctuation. Practise accurate basic clauses first, then add subordinate clauses and check subject–verb agreement and sentence boundaries.

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