Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Concern for the environment is growing and more and more people are choosing to recycle. But some people suggest that recycling is not enough. They believe we need to consume less.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

some people argue that the people are more and more recycle the environment instead of that some people says that the recycle is not enough instead that we need to consume less. This essay will discuss both the views and then give there opinion

On the one hand the major thing is that we have to protect our environment niether than only use of the recycle and people were recycle more and more the environment because they need to sufficiant for the up comeing generations. For example, people were cutting the wood and from that wood people makes the paper and that paper were useful to the childrens that why people cut the tree.

On the other hand the second major thing is that we have to consume it also because if we not conserve that all thing that it will be difficult for all over world that if all people were cut the tree and wasting the water

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the two broad positions—recycling and consuming less—and signal that you will give an opinion. However, the discussion is only minimally developed: the first body paragraph focuses on cutting trees to make paper, but does not clearly explain how recycling helps, while the second view is introduced without a complete explanation or supporting example. Your own opinion is promised in the introduction but is not actually stated. The response also does not meet the required 250 words, which leaves important parts of the task unanswered. To improve, explain each view directly, add a relevant example for each, and state your position clearly in both the introduction and conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response with an introduction and two body paragraphs, and the signposts “On the one hand” and “On the other hand” help show that two views are being considered. However, the ideas do not progress clearly within the paragraphs. For example, the first body paragraph moves from protecting the environment to recycling, then to cutting trees and making paper, without explaining the links between these points. The final paragraph ends abruptly, so there is no conclusion to bring the discussion together. Use a clear topic sentence, develop one main idea at a time, and connect examples explicitly to the argument. A short concluding paragraph would also make the overall structure more complete.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “protect our environment,” “recycle,” “consume less,” and “generations.” These choices show awareness of the subject, but the range is limited and several word choices or forms make meaning unclear, such as “recycle the environment,” “sufficiant,” and “up comeing generations.” Some phrases are also unnatural, including “consume it” and “all over world.” Aim to use precise topic vocabulary and check spelling and collocations. For instance, describe people as “recycling materials” rather than recycling the environment, and use “reduce consumption” when discussing using fewer resources. More accurate phrasing would help your ideas come across clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You make an effort to use both simple statements and longer clauses, including “because they need…” and the conditional idea beginning “if all people…”. However, control of sentence structure and verb forms is inconsistent, and several sentences are difficult to follow. Examples include “people were recycle more and more” and “if we not conserve that all thing,” where the verb forms and sentence construction are faulty. There are also problems with agreement and articles, as in “people makes the paper” and “the recycle.” Punctuation and sentence boundaries need attention, particularly in the long final sentence. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with correctly formed clauses using “because” and “if.”

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