Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Concern for the environment is growing and more and more people are choosing to recycle. But some people suggest that recycling is not enough. They believe we need to consume less.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Nowdays, enviromental concern are increasing, and more people are chossing recycle waste to productthe enviroment. While some people believe that reduce polluction, others aruge that it is enough and that people should consume fewer products. in my opinion, both recycling and reducing consumption are essentail for protecting tha environment.

On tha one hand, pupils asked polluction are increased in this era. They are very dangerous oe everyone specially for childrens because their are meunsystem is very week.therefor, smoking coming for vehicles is very harmfull and banned this cars, bikes and rikhshaw. In this era mostly people lungs are dameged for smoking. Government need to such vehicles are banned because people are savely spend the life and factrioes, industrious to shifted out of city. So peoplr are easly living this era and happly spend yuors life.

example; vehicles with broken engines should be shutdown and make the environment pleasant.

On the other hands, Government make the electric bikes, cars and differents things to provied the people this will also reduce polluction, the enviroment will be better and there will be no diseases and from this peoples are very happy and will be saved fron disease. Pupils spend your life savelly and their will be health very good.

In conculction, first of all engain bikes and cars totally banned because this is very dangerous or everyone. Government are totally blind because governmant in this hug profit people used the petrol and used tha income.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You state an opinion that both recycling and reducing consumption matter, but the essay does not adequately discuss both views in the question. Most of the response shifts to vehicle pollution, banning vehicles, electric transport, and moving factories, rather than explaining the benefits or limits of recycling and consuming less. The recycling view is barely developed, and the claim that people should consume fewer products is not supported with a clear reason or example. Your position is therefore only partly addressed, and the ideas are very limited and under-developed. The response also falls short of the required 250 words. To improve, explain each view directly, support each with a relevant example, and connect your conclusion to the discussion rather than introducing a new claim about banning vehicles.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic essay shape: an introduction, two body paragraphs beginning with “On the one hand” and “On the other hands,” and a conclusion. These markers help the reader recognise the intended structure. However, the ideas within paragraphs do not progress clearly: the first body paragraph moves from pollution and health to vehicle bans and factory relocation, while the second repeats claims about health without developing a distinct argument. Some links are difficult to follow, and the conclusion does not clearly summarise the two views or your stated position. Use one main point per paragraph, arrange supporting reasons and examples in a logical order, and use linking phrases only where they accurately show the relationship between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

You attempt vocabulary related to the topic, including “recycling,” “environment,” “pollution,” “electric bikes,” and “factories,” so the reader can identify the general subject. However, the range is basic and often repetitive, and frequent spelling errors or inaccurate word choices strain understanding. Examples include “enviromental,” “polluction,” “harmfull,” and “dameged”; phrases such as “smoking coming for vehicles” and “pupils asked pollution” are also unclear. These problems make it difficult to understand some points, even when the intended topic is apparent. Build a reliable set of environmental terms and check spelling and collocations; for instance, describe vehicle “exhaust emissions” and say that they “contribute to air pollution.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You make some attempts at longer structures, including the opening contrast beginning “While some people believe…” and the sentence linking electric vehicles with reduced pollution. However, sentence control is inconsistent, and errors in agreement, articles, verb forms, and sentence boundaries frequently make meaning difficult to follow. For example, “enviromental concern are increasing” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “Government need to such vehicles are banned” does not form a clear grammatical structure. The sentence beginning “In this era mostly people lungs…” also lacks clear grammatical relationships between its parts. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses using “because,” “although,” and “which.” Check that each sentence has a clear subject and verb.

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