Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The charts below illustrates the number of the French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Firstly, there are several language shown in the pie chart the Occitan language was high in its rate of speaking in spoken habitually and spoken occasionally. It is very high spoken language as compared to the other languages. its rate is 600 habitually and 1m in occasionally rate.

Secondly, Alsatian is on the second number as compared to the other languages. its rate is 600 habitually and 200 in the occasionally.The all other languages are at the average rate.

The rate of languages to their own children at the top is the Alsatian its ratio is the 400.Occitan is at the second number its ratio is the between 200 and 300. The other are on the average ratio of speaking.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response identifies the two chart topics and gives a few relevant figures, including Occitan at about 600,000 habitual and 1 million occasional speakers, and Alsatian at about 400,000 speakers to children. However, coverage is minimal: it omits the key contrast that Occitan has by far the highest occasional figure, while Alsatian leads in transmission to children. Some comparisons are inaccurate or vague: Alsatian is not clearly second overall, and “the other languages are at the average rate” does not describe the data. The report also falls short of the 150-word minimum; 28 words copied from the prompt are excluded. Add a clear overview and compare the main figures across both charts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic sequence, moving from the first chart to the chart about speaking to children, and “Firstly” and “Secondly” signal this order. This gives the reader some organisation. However, the progression is limited and the two charts are not clearly introduced as separate sets of information. Repeated phrases such as “its rate” and “the other languages” make the comparisons difficult to follow, while “The all other languages are at the average rate” does not specify which languages or figures are meant. Use one paragraph for each chart, begin with an overview, and connect comparisons explicitly—for example, contrast Occitan’s high childhood figures with Alsatian’s leading figure for speaking to children.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses a small set of relevant terms, including “habitually,” “occasionally,” “rate,” and “ratio,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, vocabulary is repetitive and several choices are imprecise or unnatural for describing chart data. “The Occitan language was high in its rate of speaking” and “the other languages are at the average rate” do not express the comparisons clearly; “pie chart” is also an incorrect chart label, as the visuals are bar charts. Aim for precise reporting language such as “recorded,” “stood at,” “was the highest,” and “compared with.” Vary the terms used for figures and describe the languages as categories rather than repeatedly calling them “the other languages.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most sentences use simple structures, and the reader can usually identify the intended comparison. However, errors in agreement, articles, sentence boundaries, and punctuation are frequent enough to make parts awkward or unclear. For example, “The charts below illustrates” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “there are several language shown” has problems with both agreement and plural form. The sentence beginning “Firstly” also runs into “the Occitan language” without clear punctuation, and “The rate of languages to their own children at the top is the Alsatian” is difficult to parse. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled comparisons using “whereas” or “while,” with consistent punctuation.

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