Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar charts below illustrate a significant number of parents spoke a Franch old language when their were children . Although a number of their own children use to speak France language.

Overall, A university lecturer describing the information that, praents spoke language both spoken habitually and spoken occasionally accoding the whole period Occitan is the higest figure while Corsican is the lowest figure. Also language use by children the higest figure is Alsatian while Corsican is dicline.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the two broad measures and attempt an overview, noting that Occitan is highest among the childhood figures and Corsican is lowest. However, the report is very incomplete: it gives no numerical comparisons and does not describe the main contrast between the childhood figures and the much smaller numbers speaking languages to their own children. The claim that Alsatian is highest for language use with children is inaccurate; its figure is highest, but the response does not clarify the comparison or support it with data. The task requires at least 150 words, and this response is substantially below that minimum. To improve, cover both charts, select key figures, and explain the most important comparisons accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence is followed by a paragraph beginning “Overall,” and the ideas broadly refer to the two charts. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the first sentence combines several ideas unclearly, while the overview shifts abruptly between childhood language use and children’s language use. The phrase “A university lecturer describing the information that” does not form a clear link or complete idea. Capitalisation after “Overall” and the comma also disrupt the flow. Use a clear introduction, a concise overview, and separate paragraphs for the two sets of figures, linking comparisons with simple connectors such as “whereas” and “by contrast.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some task-relevant vocabulary, including “bar charts,” “spoken habitually,” “spoken occasionally,” and “figure,” so the reader can recognise the general subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spellings make the meaning unclear: “Franch old language,” “praents,” “accoding,” and “dicline.” “Use to speak” is also not an appropriate expression for describing the chart. Aim for accurate, standard phrases such as “regional languages,” “the number of adults,” and “spoke a language to their children.” Check spelling carefully and avoid repeating “figure” without specifying what is being compared.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both a longer opening sentence and an overview, but sentence structures are not yet controlled consistently. For example, “The bar charts below illustrate a significant number of parents spoke…” lacks a grammatical link between “illustrate” and the following clause. “Although a number of their own children use to speak…” is an incomplete subordinate clause, and “Overall, A university lecturer describing the information that…” is not a complete sentence. There are also problems with articles, agreement, and verb forms, as in “when their were children” and “the higest figure is…”. Build accurate simple sentences first, then add comparisons using “while” or “whereas”; check that each sentence has a subject and a finite verb.

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